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Peter Stavropoulos (10/21/2008 4:17:00 PM)
Great poem, Aldo. As good as anything I've read on PoemHunter. It made the tears well up in my eyes. A poem needs to come from the heart to be a poem. This very clearly did. Well done! !
(I think you may have meant to type 'receive you' instead of 'deceive you' in line 30 ish.) |
we say hewwo (4/18/2008 2:24:00 PM)
Amen. An awesome, heartfelt poem. It's even slightly longer than a lot of the poems, to my surprise. |
Subbaraman N V (1/26/2008)
A great poem! Nice prayer! Admission of several aspects before the Lord! Right thing to fall on HIS feet and crave for HIS blessings! May you live for 100 years with all joy and peace, health and prosperity!
I go to the Almighty and seek HIS blessings to face the challenges of life strong and bold.
I receive HIS! |
Annie Cordelia Adams (12/29/2007 9:09:00 PM)
Okay, so maybe this poem is better, because it has some substance to it. I like it. It is very invigorating and inspirational. But there is one line where you say you are 'kissing the Lord and are eager to deceive him.' You are from Brazil, so I cannot blame you. To 'deceive' is to trick. Instead, why not inser the word 'serve' or 'bless' or something positive. Good work though. |
Meggie Gultiano (8/26/2007 8:32:00 AM)
okey, this is good..not bad at all |
Hema Kadir (8/22/2007 2:53:00 AM)
your very best work in all I read!
Simply from the heart and to mine I felt reading it......
For, turning to lord in 42 years I too find peace......After all these years...
Thankyou for sharing it! |
Emmy Wong (3/28/2007 9:01:00 PM)
ooooh. very long but it's still a great poem. |
Dorothy- A. Holmes (3/12/2007 7:55:00 PM)
Aldo...Forgiving hearts forgiving find, to them the Christ is ever kind...I read this somewhere when I was a child...I love the passion of this poem...check line 28...I counted down and I think it is line 28...add another 's' to kissing...and I am not sure the word you want is to 'decieve' you...I could be wrong...but Amen to it all. |
Chris Mendros (3/6/2007 10:16:00 AM)
it seemed to me, also, too long at first, but on a rereading it became clear, that the debt of gratitude the writer feels to his Lord is immense.
It is possible that this poem may not even cover it all.
How does one who feels such gratitude confine it to the limits of the printed page?
Pushing out the limits of language, as all good writing should. |
Tha Mystic One (3/5/2007 1:45:00 PM)
Although very long it was well worth the reading :) Very good poem |
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