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Bri Edwards
Bri Edwards redwood city / United States, Male, 66
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retired usps clerk
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About Me : I think one of my high school English teachers gave me the only D I ever got on a postcard [gee, over a year after writing this bio i i have gone to edit it and find ... more »

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  • POEM: PH: Love: Oh, Let My Love...(Rev 2) by Brian Johnston (12/28/2014 12:56:00 AM)

    just as i suspected! someone did seem to like it; just not me. here is the same comment i sent to you as a message:

    Announcing a new typo; well, really an 'old' typo........... repeated! :

    'It’s smoothness and the shine'................. but i still think you're an ok guy, even though you can't remember 'its' from 'it's', and probably not 'tits' from 'tats'. i know tits, but i don't know what 'tats' is.

    please! i just ate! i don't WANT to hear about your 'fermented tissues'! it's (not its) even too (not to) painful to type the phrase! !

    'But the cracked eggs shells of life'............... i'm not sure if 'eggs shells' is ok or not. so you can leave it as it is. BUT if you leave it, i believe the next lines should read NOT 'But the cracked eggs shells of life
    That now populates even distant stars, ', but instead: 'But the cracked eggs shells of life
    That now populate [no s] even distant stars.'

    not my cup of tea, but someone will probably say 'bravo'. thanks for giving me a chance to knock it around. bri :)
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    feel free to delete if i've been too rough on ya, big guy. :)
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    well, i just glanced at the poem above, without reading the whole thing, and i see it has changed since you sent it to me in a message. you've corrected your it's typo. good! and you've thrown in something about dinosaurs! ! ok, i'll read the above version, even though it is getting late. YOU are probably in bed dreaming up more stuff.

    well, the first stanza is pretty good. the second seems a BIT muddled to me. maybe you should break it into shorter sentences? the third stanza also stymies me a bit, and i would capitalize earth, as i believe it is a proper name when used to referred to this forsaken planet!

  • POEM: What Shall I Say About It? by Robert Westlake (12/27/2014 8:31:00 PM)

    the title is EXACTLY what i have to say about it, this poem. bri :)

  • POEM: 174. by John Westlake (12/27/2014 7:50:00 PM)

    i kind of liked Michele's comment. as for me.........i've fumbled my way through life, been very lucky, and found myself satisfied and ready to die. in fact i'm a little bit (very little, but some) anxious to die before things turn sour!

    i've sent a private message to John aka Profanisaurus about stanza # 2.

    sometimes interference is good. but, i agree, not always. AND, as you write, the best laid plans (i think of mice and men is how someone finished the sentence) can go wrong. that's how al capone ended up in Alcatraz (an island prison i've toured..... after it closed for business) , dying of syphillis i think. well, i checked my facts online. he DID serve some time in Alcatraz, but only died years later, a free but very unhealthy man. and, yes, he had syphilis, but there is only one l in syphilis, and he did not die directly from it though it did a job on his brain function(s) .

    i hope to give myself some applause before i die (in case no one else cares) . hey! why take any chances? i'll applaud ME now. CLAP CLAP CLAP. ............did anybody reading this, besides maybe Brian Johnson, get the humor in CLAP CLAP CLAP? ? the clap is what some people call another STD (sexually transmitted disease) which al capone had......... Gonorrhea.
    bri :)
    thanks for sharing, Profanisaurus. any thoughts on a title? maybe Fate Is Bullshit? just a thought.

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  • Bri Edwards (9/20/2013 6:47:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    can anyone tell me (please) how to find a poem (i know its name and author's name) which has been submitted to the contest now in progress
    on poemhunter, WITHOUT having to click through scores (hundreds?) of poem titles looking for it? i do not plan to enter a poem myself, but i've
    been asked to look at and vote on a friend's poem. THANKS. bri :)
    p.s. i found the poem once after minutes of clicking, but i accidentally clicked it away and could not figure out a way to go back to it.

  • Bri Edwards (5/20/2012 11:52:00 PM) Post reply

    Aditya, i really enjoyed the story and how you described the woman/girl. and suddenly she was gone! that is too bad if it really happened to you, but i liked the way you quickly changed the story from " glad" to " sad" . i do have some suggestions concerning your English, which overall i found to be excellent.
    line 2: " clam" i'm sure is meant to be " calm"
    line 7: dropp the word " the" . it's not needed.
    line 10: change it to " Stilled the world for a while."
    line 19: try " I now stand amid (or amidst) the crowded place."
    from Bri Edwards .......nice job ......8 or 9 out of ten, if you make my suggested changes

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