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Bri Edwards
Bri Edwards redwood city / United States, Male, 66
Profession :
retired usps clerk
Education :
quit college
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About Me : I think one of my high school English teachers gave me the only D I ever got on a postcard [gee, over a year after writing this bio i i have gone to edit it and find ... more »

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  • POEM: A Beaver's Bank by Stephen Katona (10/20/2014 11:58:00 PM)

    OOPS! my mistake. about beavers not being rodents. they are rodents (but rabbits aren't; rabbits used to be, apparently; has anyone told them?) according to Wikipedia, as Steve has so kindly pointed out to me (and i verified for myself online....if one can believe what one reads online) .
    i wonder if beavers realize that they are rodents. hmmm? good thing house mice are smaller. otherwise i would have to move to a larger house to accommodate them. bri :)

  • POEM: A lamb in the jungle of men by Aftab Alam (10/20/2014 8:39:00 PM)

    a little typo: Half of the world belomgs to us ...belongs
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    i especially liked the following lines, but i felt, from reading your bio, that you are a religious man, so i wonder why these lines seem to be negative towards religion. hmmm?

    Caste, religion and creed
    Existed on the tongue of greed
    All the above three are the weed
    And nothing else
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    and i liked these lines as well, but i'll insert in brackets [ ] some english suggestions. also, here and one other place i believe the girl asks a question but you do not use a question mark.

    Why they encroached, our queendom [why have they encroached** (on) our queendom? ]
    Why we called only a kingdom? [why are we called only a kingdom? ]
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    **en·croach
    in'kroCH, en'kroCH/
    verb
    verb: encroach; 3rd person present: encroaches; past tense: encroached; past participle: encroached; gerund or present participle: encroaching

    intrude on (a person's territory or a thing considered to be a right) .
    rather than encroach on his privacy, she might have kept to her room
    synonyms: intrude on, trespass on, impinge on, obtrude on, impose oneself on, invade, infiltrate, interrupt, infringe on, violate, interfere with, disturb;
    informalhorn in on, muscle in on;
    archaicentrench on
    she didn't want to encroach on his privacy
    advance gradually beyond usual or acceptable limits.
    the sea has encroached all around the coast
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    rapist hurting to themselves..........may i suggest: 'rapists are hurting to themselves' or 'rapists harm themselves'

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    but who is more harmed? the rapists or the raped? ? thanks for sharing. an interesting take on motherhood/nationhood. bri :)

  • POEM: Instructions For Writing a Poem by Frank N. Footer (10/20/2014 7:42:00 PM)

    how coincidental! ! ! ! another PH member friend mentioned lamb in a comment to me recently. you did mean lamb, didn't you! ? ?

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  • Bri Edwards (9/20/2013 6:47:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    can anyone tell me (please) how to find a poem (i know its name and author's name) which has been submitted to the contest now in progress
    on poemhunter, WITHOUT having to click through scores (hundreds?) of poem titles looking for it? i do not plan to enter a poem myself, but i've
    been asked to look at and vote on a friend's poem. THANKS. bri :)
    p.s. i found the poem once after minutes of clicking, but i accidentally clicked it away and could not figure out a way to go back to it.

  • Bri Edwards (5/20/2012 11:52:00 PM) Post reply

    Aditya, i really enjoyed the story and how you described the woman/girl. and suddenly she was gone! that is too bad if it really happened to you, but i liked the way you quickly changed the story from " glad" to " sad" . i do have some suggestions concerning your English, which overall i found to be excellent.
    line 2: " clam" i'm sure is meant to be " calm"
    line 7: dropp the word " the" . it's not needed.
    line 10: change it to " Stilled the world for a while."
    line 19: try " I now stand amid (or amidst) the crowded place."
    from Bri Edwards .......nice job ......8 or 9 out of ten, if you make my suggested changes

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