This is a very beautiful poem! Rich in imagery and parallelism. I will have to agree to disagree with you a bit regarding the content, though, because it has some minor conflicts with my conservative Christian views. But anyway, the poem itself is beautiful. Thanks for reading mine. God bless you ^_^
You have an impressive skill in writing poems. Let me just give you a friendly advice: Don't write for the sake of being read - write for the sake of writing. Write for the love of writing, not for the love of being read.
So keep being inspired and keep writing! God bless you: D