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  • Julianna Mcleod (3/25/2013 6:50:00 PM) Post reply

    how is this?its moving and true...

    It's all the same:

    The worst part is, I can't stop this. We wonder why no one can get along. They hate our friendship because it's strange, because it's different, because it's not the same. So what?we're odd balls. Not everyone is the same. If everyone were the same then we couldn't tell each other apart. we'd think the good people are bad and the bad people are good. We'd get lost between each other just to find our way home! ! we stop... the world stops for a minute, you look around at all the people around you... everyone's the same. There's no colors, it's just so plain. We try to run away but everything's still the same! ! you try to walk in the other direction, you still try to run away! but you can't... your stuck in this vortex, people think it's a game. You can't find the door way out and why is that?Because its all the same! ! you run fast and hard, taking your hopes and dreams with you! hoping to escape, to find the right door.... you run to it, you miss, you always miss! ! Instead you hit a brick wall. The bricks hit you as they fall, like how you fell on them the way you fell for him! you climb out from under the debris... people know, they can see, they feel your pain, but do nothing. Nothing! because it's all the same! ! it's happened to everyone, we've felt the pain, we've lost everything and nothings been gained! your hoping they'd save you, you think that they might, but nobody does it, nobody turns on the light! nobody's fought, and no one is willing to fight! They're not that human if they don't fight for what's right. They don't try to change it, they just leave at the sight. because they've seen it before, nothings new and nothings changed. everyone is trapped in this vortex together. we brave the storm and pummel the weather! ! at some point we will get out, but just make it through, and when it happens we won't know what to do, because nothings been gained, its still just the same! ! we are still stuck on this earth, and everywhere we look we see the same thing! ! there's more space to run... so you run as far and as far as you can to escape this madness. but again your still trapped on this earth! and you know the only way to escape is to leave this earth! Its always been the last resort because you don't want to leave everyone behind, but that doesn't matter anymore, because everyone's the same! so you do it. your gone. left the earth. and everyone goes on as they have, because they've seen it before, it's all just the same.

  • Gaayatri Chandrasekharan (3/18/2013 4:25:00 AM) Post reply

    I am new to writing poems and love to write.Can someone please go through my poems, rate and suggest ways to improve?All your valuable criticism and suggestions will be appreciated.I will be very grateful for your advice.
    Thankyou! !

  • Zoey Hart (3/12/2013 11:51:00 PM) Post reply

    I kinda only just started writing poems, I'm not too sure if my first one is any good, but I was just wondering what your thoughts are on my first one I put up on here.
    'Acting Behind A Smile'

  • Ella Pitt (3/12/2013 6:10:00 AM) Post reply

    Would really appreciate it if anybody could check out my poems particularly the newest ones

  • Waka Waka (3/1/2013 12:54:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    is this a free verse poem?

    I like to play sports
    Baseball, softball, football
    In a way there all the same
    a ball you need to throw
    but yet they are completely diffrent
    to the eye of the beholder

    P.S. im in jr. high

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    • Faustina Marie (3/1/2013 7:03:00 PM) Post reply

      yes it is. " there" should be " they're" and " diffrent" is missing an e

  • Phillip Ibsen (2/22/2013 6:02:00 AM) Post reply

    hi.. just joined poem hunter
    i love writing poems as a hobby and whenever am free.
    most of the poems i read from other poets are awesome
    and some friends encouraged me to join poetry club
    i would like to get your comments... on some of the pieces i write
    i know am not perfect but at least i will have to try....

  • Rookie - 0 Points Muhammad Mirash (2/21/2013 4:41:00 AM) Post reply

    Please read my new poem 'Truth and Imagination' and give me your valuable advices.
    read and comment my other poems also

  • Rookie - 0 Points Jackson Olagunju (2/17/2013 7:31:00 AM) Post reply

    Hy everyone am jackson frm Nigeria and am a young poet am try to be a very gud poet i want u guys to read sum of my poem and tel me wat u tink plz ur comment are needed....tanx

  • Rookie - 0 Points Sarmad Ali (2/8/2013 1:20:00 AM) Post reply

    I would really love if please someone read my new poems Forlorn Young snd Dwelling snail
    I would also love if i get some poet friends :)

  • Rookie - 0 Points Jagmeet Singh (1/28/2013 11:03:00 AM) Post reply

    I'm Not a proffesional poet, but like to write poems as a hobby.
    According to my colleagues they are well written.

    When i read other old but gold poets' poems, so difficult language
    is used and most were boring.My poems are easy to understand
    and full of fun.
    so enjoy reading and comment as much as you can.

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