(9/19/2012 10:21:00 AM)
can i please get my pieces read see if im wasting my time thanking you gavin boyle
(9/19/2012 6:19:00 AM)
I am very new here and I have posted three poems. do read them and rate them. and don't be shy, I won't mind negative comments. :)
but please read and rate them.... I really need you guys to tell me how I am at poem writing! ! !
(9/18/2012 6:20:00 PM)
Hey guys, hoping you guys could read my poems to critique them and rate them, don't be shy and tell me what you think.
(9/18/2012 6:16:00 PM)
i joined a few minutes ago. haven't really gotten accustomed to this yet but i posted two of my poems :) so feel free to read them. i'll post up more once i get accustomed to the site and figure out how things work.
please and thank you!
(9/18/2012 8:20:00 AM)
hey you all respected poets.
i am a new member of this family.
so i would love if you read my poems and leave your important comments to let me know your feedback about those poems.
(9/17/2012 7:50:00 PM)
Well, I'm new to this, so please go read m poem and tell me what you think. Have a wonderful day!
(9/15/2012 2:23:00 PM)
Newest poem feel free to read ma poems i got a new one titled farewell
Lamis Fahal .
(9/13/2012 7:07:00 AM)
Please read my poem and comment please and if you liked it feel free to read the rest of them.....
Should I let go
Should I let go
Of my perfectly safe shell
Because I don't really know
Will I fly or drown in an endless well
Will he protect me
Or make me a part of a bigger game
Is there a trick that I don't see
Will he make me hate my life and name
Will he stab me in the back
And lie in my face
My heart will he crack
And make me feel outa place
Should I just be me
And act according to that reckless mind of mine
Should I believe what you say
But iis it you, or just another play
(9/12/2012 11:08:00 PM)
I need u to read ma poem the 'greatest command' and others and pls do comment.
Lamis Fahal .
(9/12/2012 10:44:00 AM)
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hey, i would love it if you read my poems and left a comment :))))
to our heart we listened!
I caught my reflection
At the corner of your eye
But there is still this question
As our eyes glinted when we said goodbye
I asked why
You gave out a pause
It burnt me that sign
You still meant something to me I suppose
You and I stood there in silence
and we couldn’t find the words to make it break
Nothing but or tears crushing down
Because we knew our love wasn’t fake
My heart beated fast
As you wiped out my tear
At you, that look was my last
Unfortunately with no words to hear
I had enough
I cant pretend to be anymore strong
I can see you trying to be tough
But we both know, leaving was wrong
I waited and each other we stared and looked
Then I couldn’t hold it and gave you my back
Right there you stood
Me fainting away, and strength I lack
Then my heart stopped beating
And felt no pain at all
I felt like flying
And there is no gravity to make me fall
I felt that an angel
Held me between his wings
I felt like every thing around me
Our song started to sing
And my heart stopped beating
As you ran and held me close and tight
You whispered “your heart I will start healing
Because am the one who broke it, not again not even a might
You again whispered: without you I will die
Because no one can live without his heart
To our heart we will no more lie
And we will never be apart
You looked deep into my eyes
And saw the words unspoken
How much pain and love there lies
They want you with arms open wide
Everything else stopped
And our eyes glistened
With a smile I turned and hugged you tight
And finally to our hear we listened