Mike, I love this. However, I feel that what you have posted, is a poem in disguise. The line breaks make it look like a poem, but the truth (IMHO) is, that however it is portrayed on the page...it is poetic. I personally see no need to associate the new with the old, and thereby kowtow to the traditional, when endorsing the NOW and what follows beyond.
Again, I will re-state: I still love this.