Poetics and Poetry Discussion
(6/15/2013 7:53:00 PM)
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Problems again: belly of the beast is a cliche. At least no irritating rhyme going on, but your clusters of adjective-noun phrases (vague trace, carnal recall) have an annoying sameness. I'd suggest stop writing and immerse yourself in some good contemporary writers. Otherwise, there's no way you'll improve as a poet. Doing the same things over and over with little guidance insures you won't grow.
Alice Vedral Rivera
(6/15/2013 6:33:00 PM)
Correction - Deprivation was written in 2008.
Comment of the Day
- A very well constructed poem with perfect rhyming beautifully written