Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop

Workshop for poetry written in traditional forms.
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Austin Straussfield Male, 24, Nigeria (10/6/2012 6:50:00 AM)

Check this out...i'm kinda new here and will be needing guide from the experienced one...please i want you all to comment on this
" I never knew i could fly
until i see you cry
Patiently waiting for your smile
but it's way long along the tide
you make me walk the mile
even though its for a while
i never knew i could fly
until i see me try..."

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  • Gulsher John (10/17/2012 6:30:00 AM) Post reply

    great, but don`t confine your feelings to just rhyming, use free verse or blank verse,

  • Okoronkwo Jackson Jonathan (10/8/2012 2:40:00 PM) Post reply

    I love your portrayed idea but you have to synchronize your lines to allow a free flow and sensational link. Add meaning I mean. Check the first two lines.

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