Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop
(10/19/2005 3:45:00 PM)
I enjoyed this poem, you have good imagery and you rhyme scheme works nicely. The only suggestion I would make would be 'carved by a tsar' this line sounds a touch awkward to me. Besides that I love it!
Ikazoboh Austine Jeffrey
(10/16/2005 9:24:00 AM)
hello barber that was a very good one and the rhyming was good. The tone sounds like the poet 'you' just got his heart broken.