Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop
(3/18/2005 8:20:00 AM)
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First of all, a haiku doesn't have to contain a nature reference. It is a form of poetry like any other and can be on any subject.
And thanks for pointing out the past/present contradiction. To fix this problem and keep the poem exactly the same, here is my new draft:
A Stormy Day
Out of the window,
Looking up, I found hope in
Jubilant gray puffs.
I knew something was wrong, but I couldn't put my finger on it.
Lee Ann Schaffer
(3/12/2005 7:19:00 AM)
I like the way you put that. It was what I was feeling too, but you managed to more articulately express it... which is what this is all about, right?
-and you did know that the cloud reference was nature, right? Unless you don't get out much... (Just kidding, too.)