Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop

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Tears filled her eyes as she spake

overcome with the gruesome memories

goosebumps did her words awake

the tales made our guts go wobbly

whether myth or tale

we did not bother to query

because lie as she may

those were the stories of our grandma Maggie

Just wanted to share a poem to see what people thought :)

'The Raven'

A shadow looms overhead, blanketing the ground
people look up in terror, running around
Fearing what they don't know, they fight
Piercing arrows through the heart, midflight
The beast falls to the hard earth
Remembering all of her mother's warnings at birth
She lies there motionless, tears on her cheeks
Waiting, trying to find the peace she seeks
But no light she finds in the night
So she lies there, cold, until the morning light

Hey guys, would love you to dropp me an honest comment on my poetry and i'll do the same for you.

http: //www.poemhunter.com/isunge-mwangase/ here is something I wrote yesterday called 'My Heart Crashed With The
Loudest Din'

My heart crashed with the
loudest din,
Loving you is the greatest sin,
Because the wages of it is my
death,
You made my soul leave the
earth,
Only now I see the stage clear,
Your heart has always been its
bier,
I crack with such a pain,
Like a land that has never
had rain,
But I will go without a fight
For your happiness is my
might.

Hi guys!

please comment on how I can improve my future works and you can find my previous works here:
www.poemhunter.com/mark-trajano/

Best Regards and take care everyone!
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this is a song/poem I wrote, I would like comments on improvement, ideas on how to make this a song, changes in lyric suggestions.

I'm bad, I'm a develishy slimy man,
with wicked and vile intentions,
and a infernal and hellish plan.

Corruptive and pervasive, and all together sick,
unholy and despicable with ugly hellish wit.

A genius in sheep's clothing, a devil in disguise,
my words are sweet as honey but I'm planning your demise.

You'll never see it coming, in your mind I'm your best friend,
Like adding sugar to a meal, it'll taste sweeter in the end.

I'll see your face in shock,
that I would have stabbed you so,
I'll grin a evil grin and stare into your soul.

you'll finally breath your last breath,
it will fill me with such joy; to know that you never knew
that you where simply just my toy.

Sleeping Beauty
(This has some rhyming and some lines without it. The rhythm though, is still there)

Under kingdom lights came a whine
Then a cry, an unknown cry
From the room of the royalty
In the crib was a sleeping beauty.

One year birthday for this child
Gifts and songs flowered her smiles.
Then all was dark but a glow
The kingdom's enemy with her crow.

Declared death on the sixteenth year
Prick her finger on a spinning wheel.
But a fairy from the three
Said a kiss will undo the sleep.

The town's wheels were all in flames
To protect the beauty from a curse.
But what was the last wheel doing there?
Hidden by evil waiting for the year.

Picking cherries from the green
There she met her prince charming
Animal friends were there to see
Love was in princess beauty.

Sixteenth year for the girl
Wore a dress and sat waiting.
A small glow was in the air,
Led the beauty to a lair.

Just a touch, her vision blurred
Too late the fairies had found her.
In to bed to await the kiss
The whole town slept, all in bliss.

Prince charming with his sword
Clashed with the wicked dragon lord
With his might, the sword he threw
To the heart it went through.

Up the stairs to sleeping beauty,
The girl in the woods he met singing.
Kissed the princess with his love
Eyelids open, curse undone.

All was well, love was found
Married the prince, saw the town.
The fairies cried with the king and queen,
Sleeping beauty found her happy ending.

For rhymes, I like this website:

http: //www.rhymezone.com/

It also has near rhymes which helps as well.

Hi everyone. I have a question. I love to write rhyming poems but sometimes I am at a loss for what word that will rhyme and still fit in the poem. Is there a book I could use that has rhyming words? Right now I write the complete alphabet at the top of my paper with the vowels just below. Any other suggestions?

Am in need of literary gurus to hone my skill in the line of poetry.