Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop

Writing in rhyme and meter takes discipline. Trying to capture complex ideas while confined to structure can stifle some people. I find that searching for the " perfect" word to balance my line sometimes leads me to an even better expression of my thoughts. Please read and comment on some of my poems and let me know what you think. Thanks. Bea (B. V. Dahlen)

Reflection

Can you see your reflection through my eyes.
Covered in glitter and drowning in lies.

Are you staring back at an image you’ve come to despise
All that poison has left you broken and unwise.

Hiding behind a facade, nothing is as it seems.
Lost in an illusion and caught up in a dream.

Blinded by the haze of your own destruction.
In the wake of a bitter seduction.

Will your eyes be forever wide shut,
Hiding behind all that smoke and smut?

What happens when you finally fall to your knees
And there is no one to answer your pleas?

When will you be able to look into her eyes,
Free and totally stripped of your disguise?

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Song of Life-
My dependency on your resplendency
Has brought my once thought fiction
Into reality
Crowning you as my new addiction
Listen closely now to the steadfast sound
You have my heart pounding out loud
Do with it as you must
Only to you will I entrust
This muscle that allows you to behold my presence
For it is the living essence
Of my love to you my dearest
So as long as you can hear it
The day will never come
When our lustful feelings grow numb
Together our beating hearts compose the beat
To our song that remains unsung
We together can live our lives
And in the process form our paradise
Now with every step forward we take
We will begin to create
A song from our hearts
Filled only with the perfect words
The three words that ring true
More so than others do
I love you.

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Ladylove

There once was a lady by the name of Ladylove,
who was said to be a saint sent from above.
But no one knew just who she was;
a ghost indeed was she, was she.
She approached a swain one day, one sorrowful day;
stealing his heart as she ran away.

She left with a flutter in a moonlit still,
her beauty graces her for a splendid time.
She haste to a pond of midnight glow,
a lad soon followed as he watched her go.
She looked in his eyes with sadness there,
looking away as she's engulfed in light.

She step a foot in glistening water still,
meandering a swan not by will.
The boy he haste to grasp her hand,
letting his love guide as they shift to swans;
he a swan of black and she white,
they soar now into the ever moonlight.
The story now told of a love everlasting,
of two young swans, on moonlit casting.

-Adam M. Snow

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Through the Eyes of the Untold Lore

Through these stained eyes, dark is all I see
yet I try to live, believing this is me.
But all I could do is place my heart on a page,
and watch it rot away with every age.

All I am through your eyes is a ghost,
whom you don't dare miss the most.
All you are through my eyes, is hopelessness;
but my words I write are my distress.

Peaking through my once soulless muse,
as my heart lies victim to your solemn abuse.
I live to be your puppet, nothing more
but I am a writer of many lore.

And as I dare write with missing heart,
it is with you whom my stories start.

-Adam M. Snow

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Hi, please spend a few few minutes looking at some of my poems and any feedback you leave will be appreciated - there are few rhyming poems! Thankyou for your time.

Hello fellow poets!
Lately I've been wanting to try new poetry forms to write with, but I haven't been able to really find any... I normally write free verse, and I'd like to try something out of my comfort zone. Can I have some help?It'd be highly appreciated!