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  • Herbert Guitang Rookie - 1st Stage (4/22/2014 4:18:00 AM) Post reply

    Kindly check my poems to the poet page and check my rhyming of lines. Thank you very much

  • Frank Ovid Rookie - 1st Stage (4/18/2014 1:39:00 PM) Post reply

    For: She Who Weakened

    i poured a poesy
    from a jar in a field

    full of two-petaled
    daisies that were

    not mechanical
    boxes filled with

    churning lubricant,
    and she

    had on a dead
    man's shirt.

    purple plaid.
    the sun was just

    coming up, and
    our shoes were

    covered with dew

  • Frank Ovid Rookie - 1st Stage (4/13/2014 8:02:00 PM) Post reply

    Mam, there's been a HUGE misunderstanding. I sent that poem to 4 different members for their opinion,3 of whom are male. NOT JUST YOU! The poem is abstract, NOT about a person (much less you) . In no way was poem meant to be 'nasty'. You didn't like it. Fine. I understand. My poetry is not for everyone, and I prefer it that way. You've been replying to some others on the forum and I thought maybe you liked them. I guess not. (why were you commenting then, just to make fun of me?not sure if I understand) I don't 'cruise' for anybody or anything by the way. Just pretend it all never happened I guess. I'm fairly confused to honest.

  • Frank Ovid Rookie - 1st Stage (4/12/2014 9:31:00 PM) Post reply

    The Bag With Something Soft Inside

    Once I had a bag that
    had something soft
    I felt in that bag.
    I felt that soft.
    The soft was on the
    inside. It was soft.
    And it was a bag.
    Around the soft
    there was a bag.
    A bag with soft
    inside of it.
    Did I mention it
    was blue?

  • Michael Hylton Rookie - 1st Stage (4/7/2014 6:04:00 AM) Post reply

    It's funny! But I've been searching through the forums on this site, everywhere I look all I find is people posting their own poems. Is not the purpose of these forums to discuss ways and techniques in writing poems?Is not the purpose to create ideas on how to write?If so, then where are the discussions, where are the techniques and ideas. I have not found any advice, techniques or ideas on writing. Maybe it’s just me.

  • A Gra Rookie - 1st Stage (3/18/2014 1:25:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I can't believe I wrote a poem in like 2 minutes without even thinking!

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    • Frank Ovid Rookie - 1st Stage (3/18/2014 6:25:00 PM) Post reply

      That's how long it takes me. That's because I'm an Ovid. Ovid's have great rhythm. Congrats to you young man! (or woman, whatever the case may be)

  • Frank Ovid Rookie - 1st Stage (3/17/2014 9:51:00 PM) Post reply

    I was being super-duper rhythmic today. Moving. Grooving. Being rhythmic to the max. I wish I would have written that sh*t down. 'Lost opportunity' was all I could think about. Darn-it!

  • Frank Ovid Rookie - 1st Stage (3/10/2014 11:58:00 AM) Post reply

    I just finished moving over here from the Freeform Workshop. Pens, pencils, paper, coffee pot. The works. I've made the switch to rhythm and meter. No more Free-form stuff. That's baby stuff. Much to some people's chagrin, I've abandoned Free-form. Free-form is for numbskulls anyway. 'Oh, look at my red wheelbarrow, how wet it is' Jesus, what crap! There's no movement. No 'music' in that kind of stuff. I want to flow like water down a stream, gurgling past rocks and boulders. Flowing rhythmically across the grassy knoll is my charge!
    Oh, and rhyming! I almost forgot. I want to rhyme everything! 'Come hither, my little zither', and 'bop, bop, allu-bop, a bing, bang, boom'. You know, poems with complicated meter and rhyming. I want to start with limericks. Limericks are so musical. You can dance a little jig while you recite them. You can recite them (while atop a table in a pub) dancing a little jig. (See how I repeated that?Very rhythmic, like Ovid, my ancestor) I want to dance around like Gene Kelly (Irish guy) singing my limericks to other drunk people is basically what I'm saying.

  • Gary Drake Rookie - 1st Stage (3/6/2014 7:34:00 AM) Post reply

    Dear fellows. I was until recently a soldier, of a very elite group. And as a result wanted something more beautidful in my life. I; ve always been a student of ancient Japanese culture, and collector of their objet d; art; (AND NO. I do not own one Katana or 'Samurai-sword) . A girl I was seeing via internet persuaded me to try to write some poetry, so I tried.
    The results are posted on this site.
    What I wanted was more opinion, Honest critisism. Where it should be improved etc?
    All I got was a rant entitled 'CURB YOUR BLOOD LUSt' a member I wont name here, who had obviously misunderstood the entire poem's meaning!
    Or have I written it so badly that it reads as a call to arms of some sort?
    PLEASE; If you have the time to read my work 'Rememberance Day', I would love to hear your thoughts, and honest opinions on wgere I went wrong. Thank You. Gary Drake.

  • Suman Kumar Das Rookie - 1st Stage (2/23/2014 8:27:00 AM) Post reply

    My respected bards,

    I am happy to back to this wonderful e-plat form after few days. I cordially invite you all to read my new writes 'Bereft Beggar' & 'Sprouting Seed'. Look forward to receiving your guidance for my future works.

    Suman Kumar Das

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