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Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop


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  • Gisele Paterson (6/9/2007 11:00:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Bashing through the forest
    never felt so hopeless
    Where are you MJ?
    somewhere out there, are you ok?

    I miss your scent
    I long for your rants
    Your presence
    give me assurance

    Come back to me
    your face I want to see
    all your features too
    I miss you.

  • Viviana Torres (6/6/2007 6:19:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    This is supposed to be the rythm workshop? I dont see much point in extracting literature from cutting yourself or pooping in front of crowds. I just thought this would be hosted by someone from the site. Take care, everyone.

  • Rick Crews (5/16/2007 9:30:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    im adopted and special edd,
    my name is jiffy,
    i have three fingers,
    and i was the star of the ringer,

  • Amanda Norton (4/20/2007 6:04:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    hello everyone.... I have been on here for a few months now.... I would like for you to check out my poems... I really don't rhyme... but it happens.. mine work has more of a rhythm... so please check it out... and lend me your ear.. well eyes...

  • Dylan Barker (4/11/2007 12:33:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    would you read poems by me? i would appreciatte it.

  • Josie Whitehead (3/24/2007 10:46:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    POEMS FOR CHILDREN with art projects for them to do:

    I have made some of my poems available as inserts for birthday cards, Easter cards, Mother's Day cards etc. I know that children love craft projects. If yohttp: //www.whiteheadm.co.uk/html/greetings_card.htm#greetingsCardsu have children, why not help them to make a card for Easter as a start: (I think my husband is just about to add this to the other cards this weekend - so why not start them with a birthday card?) You can buy the A4 cards at art shops and the peel-off greetings to accompany them. I hope you have fun.

  • Stug Jordan (3/19/2007 8:24:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    I'm beggining to lose my love of rhythm. Can you still call a poem a poem when you find yourself tapping it out on your knee with a pencil?

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  • Lucy Marskell (3/18/2007 9:37:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Hey everyone!
    I'm fairly new to Poemhunter
    and i was wondering if u can check out my poems
    i use a lot of rhyme in mine cuz i love it!

  • Josie Whitehead (3/17/2007 5:31:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    I enjoy reading poetry written with rhythm and rhyme most of all, and small children enjoy it because, they tell me, it is fun. However, I must say that I have seen some terrible examples of this type of writing. Some of it can be as tacky as the sort of things you read inside cheap birthday cards. There is certainly a place in the intellectual world also for rhyming poetry, and many of our great poets have used it very successfully. I would say that, as a start to writing in this way, why not take the work of a great writer and examine how he has written, ie, the rhythm, the metre, the metaphors he uses and everything else. You can practise mirroring (or reflecting) his/her poem. Here is an example:

    Down By The Salley Gardens

    By William Butler Yeates


    DOWN by the salley gardens my love and I did meet;
    She passed the salley gardens with little snow-white feet.
    She bid me take love easy, as the leaves grow on the tree;
    But I, being young and foolish, with her would not agree.


    In a field by the river my love and I did stand,
    And on my leaning shoulder she laid her snow-white hand.
    She bid me take life easy, as the grass grows on the weirs;
    But I was young and foolish, and now am full of tears.


    Then my shadow/mirror of this lovely little poem:

    BY THE WATERFALLS OF ILKLEY


    By Josie



    By the waterfalls of Ilkley, my love and I did meet
    Her eyes were filled with loveliness, her cherry lips were sweet.
    She warned me not to love her, with a warning so severe
    But my heart told me otherwise, and my ears, they didn't hear.

    In the springtime, ‘neath the cherry trees, I looked at her again –
    To tell me not to fall for her, was to tell me quite in vain.
    She warned me not to love her – her words were loud and clear –
    But now I’m standing by the riverside, without my Ruby dear.



    I would also suggest, that people who wish to be good writers, learn how to use punctuation correctly, especially the apostrophe and inverted commas. Even simple things, such as commas, can make a big difference to the meaning. It goes without saying, that a good writer will always check their spelling too, but there is nothing worse than seeing someone writing their mother-tongue without even bothering to check what they have written, or writing in a way that suggests they are just texting a message on a mobile phone. Am I alone in thinking along these lines?

  • kskdnj sajn (3/4/2007 10:15:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Gosh, I've been waiting a long time for a 'workshop' on this forum. lol.

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