Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop
(1/19/2009 4:46:00 PM)
Hello all. My name is Mona and I'm a new poet on this site. I would appreciate it if you all read my works and gave me some feedback. I greatly appreciate it.
(1/16/2009 11:04:00 PM)
I've just published a short poem about a dream I had about Heath Ledger. Would really appreciate some feedback. Here's the direct link:
(1/5/2009 7:02:00 PM)
hai, i'm new in poemhunter..
just post my 1st poem here, check it out..
your valuable comment will b appreciated..
(12/23/2008 5:14:00 PM)
'A Finger In Your Nose'
You shouldn't put your finger
deep within your nose!
It really doesn't look too sheik!
and it's not where it should go!
Now if your digging for gold nuggets!
then your not digging where they're at!
Your fingers are suppose to do other things
like maybe tip or maybe tap?
Now when you place a digit there
deep where it can't be seen!
You may pull out a big surprise
something sticky and colored green!
(12/23/2008 10:59:00 AM)
'Old Braided Rug'
I found an old hand made braided rug
at a thrifty store, the other day.
It was quite a dirty sight to see
with some of its edges frayde.
I bought it up and rushed it home!
to give this little rug, a gentle loving needed bath.
And when it was cleaned, there was seen
braided memories of someone's past.
One braided rope weaved into another
a child's pajamas or maybe a robe?
Then an old flour bag, 'Velvet Flour'
was the logo, in this rug they'd sewed.
Then what looked to be a small center piece
remnants of someone's wedding gown.
I think they placed it there on purpose
Sort of like this little rugs, jeweled crown.
Memories of someone's life
braided into this useful little rug.
To place in front of a sink or bed
giving where ever placed, a little braided hug.
I don't know if anyone still makes them
these journals of a persons past?
But this little braided rug is now mine to treasure
to be enjoyed as long as it will last.
(12/23/2008 3:05:00 AM)
check out poems by sonny rhyme...the son of rhymes and..........
(11/28/2008 1:52:00 PM)
I agree with albert wong comment.
(11/14/2008 2:52:00 PM)
A tip to rhyme in poetry is to go through all the letter to finding a word ryhiming.
I don't know why I used a TRADE,
Now my memories seem to FADE.
(11/12/2008 9:35:00 AM)
please spare a few minutes to comment on one of my poems, feedback would be really appreciated. I'll make sure to return the favour.
Thank you :)
(11/6/2008 8:45:00 AM)
please read and comment on some of my poems I NEED FEEDBACK