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  • Elvira Gasser (12/1/2009 1:17:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Amor de lejos

    Amor de lejos, amor prohibido,
    Anoche sone contigo
    Aldespertar comprendi, que nuestro amor no tiene sentido
    Amor prohibido, hoy tu ya no eres mio,

    Sin tu amor ya todo se ha perdido
    Estoy sola con el alma desnuda, y siento frio
    Sin tus besos estoy perdida y enterrada en el olvido
    Amor de lejos, amor prohibido te vi partir y me ha dolido

    Amor mio anoche sone contigo y al despertar
    Comprendi con dolor que te habia perdido
    Quisiera entender, y me es dificil aceptar
    Que el amor de lejos ya no es amor
    Donde quedaron los abrazos, donde acabo la pasion?
    En el momento que te marchaste y me quede sin tu calor
    Porque te fuiste Si yo te amaba? Siempre te llevare en el corazon

    Con ansiedad espere tu regreso
    Y me quede aqui, sola y desnuda del alma, recordando tus caricias recordando tus besos y recordando tu amor, como un tatuaje te llevare en el alma y por siempre en este humilde corazon.

    9/27/09

  • Amandamae =) (11/11/2009 11:46:00 AM) Post reply | Read 4 replies Stage

    I comment on poems. So if you would like to know what i think about one of your poems then send me the title. I'll read it and comment. Im on Monday-Friday from 9-11am. This is in the United States. Eastern standard time. A few things to remember though... I enjoy reading poems that rhyme, it's like candy to my mind: -) ALSO, dont't forget, a good poet takes criticism into consideration.

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    • Lynn Glover (12/7/2009 9:50:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Amandamae: Please check out my work starting with A Friend on page one. I, like you, think that rhyming poems are the greatest. Thanks Lynn

    • a a (11/29/2009 2:14:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      Check out my new poem no inspiration lol, im a newbie but i am doin alright i could use some criticism.

    • Robert E Hann (11/17/2009 1:43:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      If you appreciate good rhyme perhaps you will read some of mine. Skunk's Birthday Party's one I think where Skunk is troubled by the stink. But soon he comes out of his fog and suggests Princess ... more

    • eli Gr (11/16/2009 4:22:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      tell me what you think of them i hope ... more

  • Amandamae =) (11/6/2009 8:08:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    I comment on poems. So if you would like to know what i think about one of your poems then send me the title. I'll read it and comment. Im on Monday-Friday from 9-11am. This is in the United States. Eastern standard time. A few things to remember though... I enjoy reading poems that rhyme, it's like candy to my mind. ALSO, dont't forget, a good poet takes criticism into consideration.

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    • Stephen Stirk (11/9/2009 2:16:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Also, don't forget. It is vital that 'a good poet' gives contructive and evaluated criticism

  • Luis Rosendo Medel (10/27/2009 11:21:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    hello, i'm new in this site
    and as most of members of here
    i try to write poetry, i've written almost only in spanish (my mother tongue)
    and now i'm trying to go beyond, i'm studing english philology but i don't have yet a wide knowdlege about rhyme and meter in english. In spanish i can use it quite easy but spanish and english has different structure in phonologic level. So, i hope someone can explain how to make meter in english and also which poetic licenses there are in english.

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    • Elvira Gasser (12/1/2009 12:57:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      Hi, Luis I'm also new here and as you I write mainly in spanish, somehow the words just flow, and I get inspired, if you don't mind I would like to share some of my poems in spanish, I really want to ... more

  • Lazarus Knix (10/15/2009 1:30:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    I'd be honored if some of you would be so kind as to read my poems, and critique accordingly. Thank you.

  • John Eliot (10/6/2009 6:37:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    I write poetry in a form pertaining to the bygone Romantic era. So I do not know how my poems would be acknowledged by the present-day readers. Please visit my site and let me know how my poems actually are. Please! ! !

  • Bullion Grey (10/5/2009 5:15:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Publish: to make public an idea, thought, write, poem story et.al.
    If you create something in your work it automatically it becomes the copyright of its creator. According to recent copyright standards. To register your work with Congress is an additional protection. Though very few will copy work, and if you find someone using your work and claiming ownership you will have to get legal advise (spend money) and will amount to them stopping the use of your property. Though very few get to a hearing, as out of court deals are popular.
    Mostly, don't worry about if someone will steal your works. Concentrate on your work and get it out. If your work appears in a public paper, newsletter, online, essentially it is published.

  • Margaret Mckennon (10/5/2009 4:23:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Can anyone explain to me how we copyright our poems on this website...do you copyright or just write and leave on this website. When we post our poems on this website is it considered published...because some of us send work to journals etc and they say you are to inform them if published..would this be considered as published? Please answer these queries...my head is spinning

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    • george george (10/6/2009 12:25:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      Hi Margaret; as the previous writer said, I do believe that if you have created the work, it is automatically copywritten if you say so. Just put © and your name at the bottom of each thing you publis ... more

  • Bullion Grey (9/18/2009 5:25:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Can anyone visit my site and see if it is working right? It is: www.bulliongrey.com
    Just writing and thoughts.
    thank you

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    • george george (10/6/2009 12:31:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      Hi, your site comes up fine, but wouldn't it be better to have the introduction piece up top and then the index underneath? When you first go to the site, you just get the list of things to click on, ... more

  • Lynn Glover (9/7/2009 10:42:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    I would like to ask for comments on my poem (positive or negative) titled:

    My Good Friend
    We've been friends for many, many years,
    Now you've left us with memories and tears.
    Up with God you must have a smile on your face,
    You have no pain, no hurts, not even a trace.

    We celebrate your life here today,
    We talk of the people you touched along the way.
    Helping with jobs and money and many things,
    You received the joy that doing this would bring.

    Your familly will miss you, as will I,
    We'll be coming to join you, someday in the sky.
    We'll have a reunion with family and friends,
    There will be happiness and joy with no ends.

    Now you live up in God's great domain,
    You will never again experience any pain.
    Here in your home town that you left behind,
    We will remember you as always gentle and kind.

    copyright 2008 Lynn B. Glover

    Also for a FREE Down load of my song O'er Yon Mountain which is one of my poens. Web site lynnbglover@yahoo.com Thanks

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