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  • Austin Straussfield (12/14/2012 7:49:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Check this out peeps, though a little rough...your advice and criticism is would go a long way to smoothen my writings
    Quietly bending my pride,
    for you to become my bride
    so as to have a smooth ride
    till a child comes our way.
    Take this not as dried
    or too crunchy fried.
    But rather be mild,
    and see me as wild
    with no where to hide
    'trying to pass the tide
    created by your dad...'

  • Gary Kedron (12/13/2012 10:02:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Hi...kind of new to the site, any takers on reading my work?" Thy Hunts Mans Hound" , I like this one...any feedback would be greatly appreciated...When I can will return the favor.
    Enjoy.

  • Maxwell Mlenga (12/3/2012 4:30:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    its not all about writting poetry, its about writting poetry that people can understand, after all, its all about informing and hoping to change some hearts

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    • Donnaj York (12/16/2012 10:37:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      I agree wholeheartedly. If after reading a poem my mind says, " wHaT???" , then that is, at least not my preferred poetry style, of poetry. Worse yet when I have no idea what I am reading. ... more

  • Yahya Ahmed (11/20/2012 7:15:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Hi everyone :)

    Im new on this site please check out some of my writing.

    Thank You

    Yahya Ahmed

  • Gajanan Mishra (11/18/2012 9:10:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    It is true
    I am totally yours
    I accept you in toto
    O my love
    You are my universe
    And you are my pleasure
    And I am writing poetry
    Only for you

  • Godfrey Morris (11/17/2012 10:42:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Silent Soul



    I am a poet
    silently hidden in life's closet
    with half-measured expressions
    seeking to be made whole
    secret imagination longing
    to be bold
    I am the wind
    that echoes in your head
    I am your reason
    your silent unknown

    copyright(c) 2012

  • Alexis ... (11/10/2012 1:00:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Hello Fellow Poets,

    I invite you to Read and Comment honestly on my new poem " Caught In Distance" . Thank-you

  • Crystal Rosser (11/4/2012 3:09:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Please check out my poems and comment on a couple. I would really love to get some feedback on rhythmic and rhyming patterns. Any advice is helpful. Thanks!

  • Leonid Gonzalez (10/28/2012 12:58:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    The first mother

    Deaths’ scythe is singing, death is a calling
    My light is gone, my star has fallen
    She called my name like we were lovers
    Before I knew it the dream was all over

    I cant blame her for what she has done
    She will call everyone’s name until we are all gone
    She must return what she has borrowed
    Deaths’ scythe will be calling you upon the morrow

    She was the first mother, she set us free
    She is called death but her true name is Eve
    Now she must give back what she took
    Upon her face you must never look

    She is very beautiful, Her beauty is like no other
    Her beauty saddens you, her scythe ends your sorrow
    She was the first woman, she was the first mother

    Please comment. Good or bad. Thank you

  • Rex Copperfield (10/25/2012 8:14:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Hey I'm a extremely desperate poet desperate for feedback and instructions tips hints criticism and most desperate for betterment no matter how good the cause desperate isn't a good look....please help me out! Messages comments or just reading my poems flood my inbox with criticisms comment with many tips hints suggestions and praise (if you find praise worthy things) please help! !

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