(7/14/2005 6:37:00 PM)
I agree with the other comment posted. Try to write the poems in a specific tone or voice that is unique to you, and read a ton. I recommend Richard Brautigan, Charles Bukowski, And Pablo Neruda (all classics) to see how each uses words in a unique way to convey their ideas. I am also relatively new so take what I say with a grain of salt, but I hope it helps.
Eric Paul Shaffer
(6/30/2005 10:38:00 PM)
Read some current poems in poetry reviews and in the poetry section of your local bookstore and even here on this website. I think you'll see that this 'expressive' style is not serving you well. Focus on images and the voice you really speak in to make your poems. Avoid cliches. Avoid love poems until you're over it.
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