(6/21/2005 6:40:00 AM)
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OOOPPPSS.... I forgot the 'poem'. :)
Don't touch me...
I cannot bear you touch me there.
My heart's in shambles, no longer there.
I've hidden away my deepest spring for fear
you'll drink me dry.
I am no longer yours.
Clipped tongues and broken wings will take us nowhere.
An intimate battle of love gone wrong, we fight till the death.
There cannot be a winner here for neither will give in.
I want out... my skin crawls at the thought that
you will be near me yet again.
I can't dispell the images running through my head.
I want to flee... to be... to see...
And it's not here.Replies for this message:
(7/14/2005 6:37:00 PM)
I agree with the other comment posted. Try to write the poems in a specific tone or voice that is unique to you, and read a ton. I recommend Richard Brautigan, Charles Bukowski, And Pablo Neruda (all ... more
Eric Paul Shaffer
(6/30/2005 10:38:00 PM)
Read some current poems in poetry reviews and in the poetry section of your local bookstore and even here on this website. I think you'll see that this 'expressive' style is not serving you well. Fo ... more
- Casey Rock (7/14/2005 6:37:00 PM) Post reply
Comment of the Day
- A very well constructed poem with perfect rhyming beautifully written