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  • Rookie Maria Manias (11/14/2012 4:37:00 AM) Post reply
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    Hello fellow poets, I'm also new to this. I've submitted a couple of my poems, one of which is the following, I would love to have some feedback. Looking forward to hearing from you, Maria.

    The song

    You caght me by surprise
    With your clouded hazy notes
    Seeping through the crevices of hidden places
    Drifting in like gauzy smoke
    Until tears rose at last
    From that deeply flowing spring
    Whose source is in the darkest cave
    Where all my losses lie
    You softly prised them from me
    Those visions and those dreams
    Of words and smiles of eyes and warmth
    I marvelled at the freshness
    Of the blood you drew so easily
    With the softness of your sound
    Those long lost moments not gone
    But with me here and now
    and when you slowly drifted off
    Leaving what I felt still clear
    I lingerd in the aftertaste
    Of memories of promises
    To find my soul again

    Maria Manias

  • Rookie Daxiel Musundi (11/11/2012 3:55:00 AM) Post reply

    God will defend we like a guard he will stand
    looking left and right from the east he will descend,
    spread out your wings cause in heaven we will ascend,
    and never be afraid cause in love we shall dwell.

    a look from your eyes tell me whether you regret
    falling for a man whose heart is intent,
    whose looking for a future from a being whose contempt,
    much love and blessing creature you are like a saint.

    beauty from the heavens, tell me whether you melt
    if i take a bite from your body will you tell?

  • Rookie April Swan (my Diary Of Bitterweet Chocolate) (11/6/2012 12:31:00 PM) Post reply

    Hey I'm new. I have got some poems that I would love people to read, critisisize, or coment if you like. They are realistic problems, and can be dark. So if you like poems about that they are open for interpertation. Thank you so much! I really hope you find time to read them! : D

  • Rookie - 36 Points Jetty J Newnham (11/3/2012 3:36:00 PM) Post reply

    Cold Coffee Dizzy Gilespie add some 'Tea' coool me

  • Rookie Joe Giuliani (10/23/2012 4:28:00 PM) Post reply


    Please note that my new book of poetry, " Dada Reborn: 21st Century Poems, " is now available on Amazon (Ebook) .

    These poems are intended for a mature liberal-minded audience.



  • Rookie Jazmyn Caddiell (10/8/2012 2:00:00 PM) Post reply

    angels falling from a place on high.. angels falling to the ground...thats all i have give more lines plz

  • Rookie Brishbhanu Baruah (10/7/2012 8:31:00 AM) Post reply

    Here's a link to my poems-http://www.poemhunter.com/brishbhanu-baruah/
    do visit it and feel free to speak your mind.

  • Rookie Stevie Taite (9/2/2012 5:27:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    My latest free flow. I tried to give it a little structure too, to link the stanza. Does it then seize to be free flow?Angels fall

    Angels fall
    Sometimes it is because they are tripped
    No one really to show them the way
    Easily received but selfishly not wanted
    An accident
    An inconvenience
    Left to their own devises and what they know
    They land on dirty grown, grubby nails and knees and they scramble around in ignorant bliss 

    Angels fall
    Sometimes it is because they were pushed 
    Someone forgets to polish the treasure
    Taken for granted that the ring was binding
    A habit 
    A convenience 
    Left to their longing and desires and what they deserve
    They fall on soft feathers, that leave imprints of guilty relief, and they languish a while.

    Angels fall
    Sometimes it is out of the blue for no good reason at all
    No one trips them, no one pushes them
    A grip so tight round the heart
    They land in  the ocean that is their heart and it  must be deep enough for all this love as nothing else makes any sense.

    Angels fall
    Few are the angels that keep their wings
    Please don't look down on us in that way
    This flight for you was smooth
    We all chose whether we live cushioned by a cloud or on the ground!  

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  • Rookie Aria Siren (8/18/2012 10:50:00 AM) Post reply

    Hello to my Fellow Poets:
    I'm new around here. Please read and comment on my poems-I would love to have your feedback. Here's my newest:

    Dervishes and Mastery

    Time has slapped me in the face
    The air was thick and settled
    A new tick
    A slower second
    You have mastered time
    You have mastered

    You've really swept me off my feet.
    Haven't let me down to breathe
    For weeks.
    I'm suffocating
    Bury me deeper
    Steal my atmosphere
    Let me die this way
    Heart speeding in a hundred different directions

    I'm a flat out fool
    For you.
    I'm a fish out of water
    I've grown wings
    You tell me I'm your goddess
    In frenzied dervishes you paint me
    You whisper: muse
    You brush my face with a smile
    Is the creator of something divine
    A god himself?

  • Rookie - 62 Points Godfrey Morris (8/12/2012 10:55:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    Why I Write?

    My child you ask me why

    And so I give a sure reply

    The reason why I write you ask?

    I do so to unveil a mask -

    To state a claim my dear

    And climb above a fence at last

    The reason why I write

    Is to be free -

    As that young lad's kite

    To flee from charmless grips

    And stray from harm's lustful flight

    You ask me why I write today?

    I do so that you go away!

    To a place, within my space

    That way I'll have a worthy say

    I write my dear to tell a tale

    Of places that I once had sailed

    The promises that were never had

    The eluded dreams that made me sad

    The reason why I write a verse

    Is to soothe this soul I thought was cursed

    To trod with care through lonely roads

    And pray my troubles be reversed

    The reason why I write to you

    Is so you ‘ll see my point of view

    That in all things, there is a verse

    A spring that takes away all thirst

    Copyright © 2012

    Godfrey Morris

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    • Rookie - 62 Points Stevie Taite (8/31/2012 1:09:00 PM) Post reply

      Love thus poem! So clever and held my attention! Great rhythm!

    • Rookie - 62 Points Mabel A (8/22/2012 1:20:00 PM) Post reply

      I think that your poem is amazing and i look forward to the honour, being an invited observe on your soul's journey of pen and paper

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