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  • Michael Yesihaveone (12/26/2012 11:41:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    Lisa
    her name was Lisa *******.
    I could not even speak
    Transfixed
    Eye see her
    Soak in every detail
    She knows
    They talk, they whisper
    She smiles and plays
    with the girls
    I walk in the track
    alone
    I see down
    The ground before me
    Silence
    NO Evil Names
    they
    the boys play games
    tricks on eachother
    Different
    tall
    Quiet
    Well mannered
    teachers pet
    I care not
    i walk on the track
    Alone
    I see down
    the ground before me
    the bell Rings
    Class
    Lisa
    Sitting near
    the same room
    Girls
    Shapes
    Close my eyes
    Wonder
    Whats down there?
    I am a man
    They are women
    young still
    Treated like pets
    NO
    NO
    NO
    you cannot
    you must not
    we will not allow
    Morals
    church
    I was a child
    teachings of god
    Impossible Things
    Dream
    Love
    Garden of Eden
    Gone
    is it?
    Why
    Why cant i have lisa
    Lisa have me
    Note
    My soul on paper
    What did i write
    forgotten
    Sealed love letter
    ON the bus Home
    Offer
    take
    No
    Drop on lap
    Runs
    snatch up
    Run Home
    Walk?
    Cry
    All night
    God?
    Somehow
    If I just wait
    End up happily Married
    Nothing
    I care not
    God is Good, and just
    I know I am Good
    Reward?
    Next life?
    No
    In heaven?
    Surely I wait
    Cry hard
    Lost
    I walk on the track
    alone
    I see down
    The ground before me
    Silence
    Respect
    See other girls
    Say
    Do
    Nothing
    I wait
    Lisa
    Only one
    Soul mate?
    Losing
    time
    youth
    money
    physically
    Not the man I was
    So much potential
    Lost
    Prison
    Mind
    Diversion
    What do I Want
    Now
    Money
    Worthless
    things?
    Small
    House
    cabin?
    Wait
    Die

    Replies for this message:
    • V O (1/15/2013 7:33:00 PM) Post reply

      wow that was something i like a lot

    • Gary Kedron Rookie - 1st Stage (1/4/2013 1:25:00 PM) Post reply

      Wow....Got the point....spoke to me very loud....great poem!

  • Jared Masias (12/24/2012 3:28:00 PM) Post reply

    Who Am I

    Who am I: I’m the courage to get you through the hardest things in life?
    Who am I: I’m the fighter that will fight pass the end. Pass the limit and never give up on anything or anyone.
    Who am I: I’m the love that you live for the reason you hang on so long.
    Who am I: I’m the willing that will keep you in the eyes of your loved ones?The will that keeps you living longer than planned.
    Who am I: I’m the unforgettable woman who fought long and hard for survival?The unforgettable woman who is my hero.
    Who am I: I’m the breast that was taken out?The breast that was no good because of cancer in it.
    Who am I: I’m the loving, unforgettable, courageous breast cancer fight that was ended early.
    Who am I: I’m Brenda Masias

    By Jared Masias
    ©2011

  • Clarence Prince Rookie - 1st Stage (12/22/2012 9:18:00 AM) Post reply

    Hello: Greetings to every poet here! whilst it's my pleasure wishing you all a Merry Christmas and a happy New Year; I'm also inviting you to take a little to look at my poems, especially " AGAIN! ! ! " Please feel free to comment on whichever one....! Thanks, may you all be blessed!

  • Sarah Mohyla Rookie - 1st Stage (12/18/2012 4:25:00 PM) Post reply

    Hey everyone! I'm new on this site and I'd appreciate it if you could take a look at my poems and comment on and rate them! thx! !

  • Gajanan Mishra Bronze Star - 4th Stage (11/18/2012 9:07:00 AM) Post reply

    Poetry is nectar of life please give me poetry. Poet himself is full of love full of joy. And it is only poet who can knows love, the seeds of all existence.

  • Ruby Honeytip Bronze Star - 4th Stage (11/15/2012 10:46:00 PM) Post reply

    Name change?

    A Booby Trap!

    She is not skin and bones
    Of insignificance.
    She is intelligent substance,
    And decency of character.
    She is womanly flesh
    Of hand felt proportions!
    She knows her way,
    And will hold your hand
    Until you safely find yours.
    There is no judgement in her compassion,
    Although, there is a giggle in her eyes.
    And a wiggle in her walk.
    Faith and love are the warmth
    In her nature.
    There is a nurturing heart
    Beating under the fullness of her breast....

    Did somebody say 'Breast'?

    The story ends there.

    Look closer

    © 2012

  • Maria Manias Bronze Star - 4th Stage (11/14/2012 5:28:00 AM) Post reply

    Thank you Syed and Rodney for you comments on my poem, much appreciated!

  • Maria Manias Bronze Star - 4th Stage (11/14/2012 4:37:00 AM) Post reply

    Hello fellow poets, I'm also new to this. I've submitted a couple of my poems, one of which is the following, I would love to have some feedback. Looking forward to hearing from you, Maria.

    The song

    You caght me by surprise
    With your clouded hazy notes
    Seeping through the crevices of hidden places
    Drifting in like gauzy smoke
    Until tears rose at last
    From that deeply flowing spring
    Whose source is in the darkest cave
    Where all my losses lie
    You softly prised them from me
    Those visions and those dreams
    Of words and smiles of eyes and warmth
    I marvelled at the freshness
    Of the blood you drew so easily
    With the softness of your sound
    Those long lost moments not gone
    But with me here and now
    and when you slowly drifted off
    Leaving what I felt still clear
    I lingerd in the aftertaste
    Of memories of promises
    To find my soul again

    Maria Manias

  • Daxiel Musundi Bronze Star - 4th Stage (11/11/2012 3:55:00 AM) Post reply

    God will defend we like a guard he will stand
    looking left and right from the east he will descend,
    spread out your wings cause in heaven we will ascend,
    and never be afraid cause in love we shall dwell.

    a look from your eyes tell me whether you regret
    falling for a man whose heart is intent,
    whose looking for a future from a being whose contempt,
    much love and blessing creature you are like a saint.

    beauty from the heavens, tell me whether you melt
    if i take a bite from your body will you tell?

  • April Swan (my Diary Of Bitterweet Chocolate) Bronze Star - 4th Stage (11/6/2012 12:31:00 PM) Post reply

    Hey I'm new. I have got some poems that I would love people to read, critisisize, or coment if you like. They are realistic problems, and can be dark. So if you like poems about that they are open for interpertation. Thank you so much! I really hope you find time to read them! : D

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