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Hello to my Fellow Poets:
I'm new around here. Please read and comment on my poems-I would love to have your feedback. Here's my newest:

Dervishes and Mastery
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Oh.
Time has slapped me in the face
The air was thick and settled
A new tick
A slower second
You have mastered time
You have mastered
Me


My.
You've really swept me off my feet.
Haven't let me down to breathe
For weeks.
I'm suffocating
Bury me deeper
Steal my atmosphere
Let me die this way
Heart speeding in a hundred different directions


Goodness.
I'm a flat out fool
For you.
I'm a fish out of water
I've grown wings
You tell me I'm your goddess
In frenzied dervishes you paint me
You whisper: muse
You brush my face with a smile
Is the creator of something divine
A god himself?

Why I Write?



My child you ask me why

And so I give a sure reply

The reason why I write you ask?

I do so to unveil a mask -

To state a claim my dear

And climb above a fence at last

The reason why I write

Is to be free -

As that young lad's kite

To flee from charmless grips

And stray from harm's lustful flight


You ask me why I write today?

I do so that you go away!

To a place, within my space

That way I'll have a worthy say

I write my dear to tell a tale

Of places that I once had sailed

The promises that were never had

The eluded dreams that made me sad


The reason why I write a verse

Is to soothe this soul I thought was cursed

To trod with care through lonely roads

And pray my troubles be reversed


The reason why I write to you

Is so you ‘ll see my point of view

That in all things, there is a verse

A spring that takes away all thirst


Copyright © 2012


Godfrey Morris

Evil Mary Alison always on my mind,

but then.

Another girl so special brings me to

a time back when.

Happiness was a promise, and true

darkness was not yet mine.

Before the broken heart, life torn apart,

as shattered pieces of yesterday were

lying every where.

And I sat so cold and alone as heartache

filled my soul.

Then I cried.

My mind played over the way things might

have been.

What could I do to make love new again?

Was there anything?

Did she feel the same?

Then all hope was blown away.

When I heard them say.

She was his.

Life grew so dark I lost my will to live.

And to this day, I find it hard to forgive.

This thing so cold.

She stole my heart and left me in darkness

with no love inside my soul.

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My Hero- BY POETA

I was young, you knew I was,
So you gave me a sweet,
I told you.... ’How sweet’!
Then you promised that the number will rise…..
From once to thrice,
Hmmm. how wise….
My Hero

I forgot about cavity,
But you are a dentist; so you promised me dental security,
Who am I not to be agitated?
I am inside your den yet I didn’t feel frightened,
I am proud of my uncle,
My Hero!

You make mountains look like anthills,
Debts look like petty bills,
In my Hell you prove to be heaven,
I and you just like 1+1, you equal eleven.
My Hero!

Then,
Like a vampire one day you attacked,
I am your blood but you still sucked,
Me… the virgin out of me then you left,
Me...
Bleeding downstairs due to your ‘sweetness’…. (Sob!)
You monster, evil- creature ‘sweet uncle x’
May the ground you walk on bury you,
And may your nightmares come true,
Your true lies were horny and corny,
And now I die of HIV in this bed lonely
You did this!
My Hero?
NO! YOU ARE NOT! !

Evening

The light lowers as it passes from east to west,
Orange glow diffusing from earth to grass to flower.
Daises turn and stretch and bask in the early evening.
The morning glories, wide-spread under the light
And entwined along the clover held picket fence
Have turned from magenta to amethyst to their
Last white-veined violet. Even it now grows faint.
The petals curl inward, the blue tips bend
Toward the bluer heart and the flowers are lost.

The moonflower-buds are still white, but shadows dart
From their tendril-roots, black creeps from lawn to fence,
To plants, then slowly over me. Another work worn day
Without you fades with my dirty fingers and sips of beer.
Each leaf shadow cuts another leaf shadow on the grass,
I watch as shadow seeks shadow, golden turns to black,
Then both leaf and leaf-shadow are lost, and I am alone.

Why when we were young
Friendlier skys were darker then
Streaking nightly fallen stars
LOOK! Look up again.

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... freeform in it's truest sense is the essence of poetry because the muse is spirit, , the ultimate freedom to create worlds, but equally in this life is the freedom to Love even with words... without feeling free to Love all, poetry becomes stilted, wears a mask, is close to death because few take off the mask of commonality of men who live empty grey lives looking only for escape and never seeing the door to their self-made cage is open... always has been... :)

I know I am but summer to your heart,
And not the four seasons of the year.
And you welcome love from another
Whose noble moods are not as mine.
I have no pretentious weight of age,
Nor easy spring breeze to give you.
I am all monsoons and thunderstorms,
Hot wind, hard gusts, cold rain.
I am not any wise and wintry thing;
And I have loved you all too long and well
To carry still the high sweet breast of spring.
So love me year round as you loved
Me on the bed where summer
Rose to meet our naked skin,
Sticky from sweat and making love.

But spring is here, in its budding silence,
I must be gone, steal forth with silent drums,
That you may rise refreshed with
The call of the sea gull and
Scent of the rose, and
The weight of his arms upon your
Hips and breasts.

Will you come back to me, as summer comes?Or softer yet
As it ends and the death of leaves
Begins again; to feel the crunch of
Them upon your back on an
Indian summer day in a clearing...
Or will you at that sweetest of times
Choose to bask your naked flesh
Upon other shores, other climes?

Hello all, please take some time to read my 'Nine men fall' and leave a comment on your thoughts - thank you greatly :)