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Rose Lu Rose Lu Female, 52, United States (4/2/2013 8:22:00 PM)

Sometimes I don't know why
By Rose Lu

Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so sad
I wish someone could read my mind
Come and stop by my side

Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so confined
I wish someone could share my feelings
Come and ferry me out of this island

Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so upset
I wish someone could understand my heart
Come and give me a hand

I hope you are that someone
My sweet dream in the distant land

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  • Rookie Titi Dale (4/5/2013 1:12:00 AM) Post reply
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    Hi Rose,
    I like those last lines: they sum it up shortly and sweetly, and that's good. BUT-yep, there's always a but- I think this would be even BETTER if u shaped it into rhymes :) the repitition helps also: P keep writing! You're good at it :) 0

    Titi

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