Stephen Denny Paul White
(4/6/2007 3:47:00 PM)
Got tons of poems on another website, and I'm trying out this website... so if you could comment and keep me here, I would appreciate it!
(4/5/2007 8:53:00 AM)
Hey, would you guys read poems by me?
(4/3/2007 11:20:00 AM)
Can you people please comment on my poems and ways to improve them. Such as techniques, tips, and other creative ideas please. thank you
(3/30/2007 4:11:00 PM)
Hey, I'm 15 years old, and I'd really like a chance to impress some more experienced writers and get my stuff noticed!
I have an intense passion for words, and I have developed a unique style through combining my love of para-rhymes (a style used in hiphop) without sacrificing the meaning of the poem.
My poems are all pretty intense, and I have loaded two onto the system.
I would greatly appreciate some opinions or comments, critical or otherwise.
I will return the favour!
Thankyou for your reading time
(3/30/2007 9:15:00 AM)
Hi my name is Brandi and I strongly agree with giving poems an intresting name as a matter of fact I thought of that as well. I would really appreciate it if you wii give me constructive crticism on my poems. Please be completely honest. Thanks so much in advance!
(3/16/2007 10:24:00 AM)
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Try to come up with enticing Titles for your poems. To be honest when I am looking at poems to read I pass by some great poems because the titles are ordinary. The more Intriguing, the more viewers. On that note when reading poetry look at the poems with simpler titles as well.Replies for this message:
(3/28/2007 12:10:00 PM)
Do you ever get the trouble of thinking up a brilliant title, but not having the right words to put under it? I agree with your idea. A title is a synopsis, advertisment and (sometimes) a poem all in ... more
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(3/16/2007 10:11:00 AM)
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I really need constructive critisim on my poems so,
tell me which needs improving or changes.
I would greatly appreciate the favor
(3/8/2007 2:17:00 PM)
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hi there everyone i wrote this last week - all feedback welcome
S quirming and squealing from deep down within
E ntwining my mind, spittle-hissing all of my sin
L ocking me in icy-grip till the tears burn my eyes
F ire-ridden despair blocking out all the blue skies
L icking and sordid masochistic-pig disgruntled
O pen-heart wounded bleeding, branded and humbled
A ll of their names black-scorched into torn flesh
T he ones that hurt twisting knives whisper in the cloud
H ell-bound chanting their blame and their shame
I nsomnia breeds trying to breathe through the pain
N ight-time sweats pale panic beating my chest
G ot to keep riding these waves, eventually they rest.
Petra Creffield February 2007
more on my profile page...thx for reading
(3/1/2007 3:13:00 AM)
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I have currently run out of inspiration to produce new poetry. I have not had a great deal of feedback on my exisiting 37 pieces on this site. I would greatly appreciate some feedback left in order for me to get back on track.
May I please recommend starting with the poem - 'When All Other Lights Go Out'
(2/28/2007 3:37:00 PM)
When ending a stanza or verse; do not write the first silliest rhyme that comes into your head, try to be original, it may take longer, but it will improve the poem threefold, and make more sense. Put it away in a drawer rest it, bring it out and new inspiration will help you find the right finish for for poem. Don't be trite.