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  • Charles Leonhart (8/25/2006 3:06:00 AM) Post reply

    please read my new poet (SCAR) oblivious..

  • Dan Phillips (8/25/2006 2:13:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Hi everyone. I'm an aspiring lyricist, poet, and conductor, and I was hoping to get some criticism from people on some of my poems. I've only got three so far, so it's really not too big of a deal.

    By the way, if any of you know of any good poems that are powerful, emotional, and with deep meaning that would translate well into a chorus song, please tell me. I've been trying desperately to find a suitable piece of poetry to write a new song with, and I haven't found anything yet that has struck me as especially powerful.

    Thank you very much,


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    • Anthony Marriner (8/27/2006 9:20:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      Hi Dan I wouldn't dream of pretending that I could compose or write lyrics for a song as you describe. However, to contribute to your search, have you consider the works of Byron? At first sight you ... more

  • Daniel White (8/22/2006 4:19:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    so here's my deal, i would like comments on the stuff i have posted, (not much stuff, so it likely wont take long, eh) please feel free to insult

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    • Aldo Kraas (1/26/2007 8:01:00 PM) Post reply

      You have no poems written in your poem page So how can people comment on it? Sily sily sily You are just being a smart as Sorry I must say that Grow up

  • Sheraly Espiritu (8/14/2006 5:30:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    anyone.... give me some techniques about writing poems? ? /

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    • Red Blooded Black Hearted (8/20/2006 11:41:00 PM) Post reply

      It would depent on whay type of poetry you wanna write. Rhyming poetry you just write down what work is used at the end of the line and weather the next line or the line after is going to rhyme with i ... more

    • Mary-Elizabeth Conn (8/20/2006 12:11:00 PM) Post reply

      I read 'Reminicing' and I thought it was good. Don't worry abuot rhyming (I know I'm a bit of a hypcrite but nevermind) . As you've only posted one poem so far it's hard to say how you can improve. As ... more

  • C M (8/13/2006 8:37:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    critique needed! !

    Why I wonder do I go home?
    All I feel is empty and begin to roam.
    I walk around as if I have lots to do
    When in reality I haven’t a clue!
    Sweep and Mop, Wash and Dust
    Occupy my mind before I combust

    I’ll go to the store, that’s another chore
    Fridge is empty and I must fix that door.
    Standing in the aisle I become undone
    I have nothing but to purchase for one.
    Oh there was a time I shopped for two
    There was always this for me and this for you.
    Aimless I wander, Aimless I buy
    I know I need bread, maybe I should try rye?
    You liked wheat, but that doesn’t matter
    There’s another habit I must shatter.

    What was wrong with the hinge?
    And why is Home Depot so big?
    Here I go remembering the past…..
    Oh but wasn’t it fun, building that box
    Me, wondering how long a dog’s pregnancy lasts…
    Oh yes that’s right I’m here for what reason?
    No. No. Paints aren’t what I am looking for
    Ugh! ! ! You used to find anything for all seasons
    Why is there no one in orange around?
    Forget get it! Maybe I will just nail it down

    Off I go in my empty car, to my empty bed, with my empty heart, and and an empty head
    You know what though I have grown
    I know I hate rye, I know over a door I will not cry
    So off to sleep I will try
    to dream of the times
    you were at my side
    and I hold your notes just so that I know
    you were actually here, not a Van Gogh.

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    • Mary-Elizabeth Conn (8/20/2006 12:13:00 PM) Post reply

      If you've just started then it's really good. Please don't be put off or offended by my other comment- I swear to God, I relaly don't ever mean to offend anyone. Honestly, your poem was really good. J ... more

    • Mary-Elizabeth Conn (8/20/2006 12:03:00 PM) Post reply

      This is quite a good poem with good content. My only advice would be that you perhaps shouldn't worry about the rhyming so much. You could try freestyle with some rhymes every so often. It's promising ... more

  • Rashee Shah (8/12/2006 6:41:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    juss wanted some honest opinions on stuff that ive written..

    Im hurting again,
    Theres no other friend,
    No one to share the pain with,
    Wish i could just get on with it.

    No one to tell me to stop crying,
    No one there to save me from dying,
    I think im finally giving up hope,
    Maybe its time i listened to the call of dope.

    If theres one thing ive learnt its that people lie,
    We lie, lie, lie and eventually die,
    Death is the only truth in this unruly world,
    So embrace it my friends, Embrace it like GOLD!

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    • Mary-Elizabeth Conn (8/20/2006 12:18:00 PM) Post reply

      Hi Rashee! I just wanted ot leave you a comment about this poem. It's quite a sad poem: I think it possibly stems from moving/traumatic personal experience. I really quite like this poem because i ... more

  • C M (8/10/2006 4:02:00 AM) Post reply

    Can someone read my stuff and give me opinions... with an fyi that I have just started trying this poetry stuff...

  • GreenEyes- Amor (8/5/2006 6:18:00 PM) Post reply

    and give me ur openions in this poem

  • Aj Cliff (8/5/2006 4:41:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    hey just wondeiring if ne1 could readmypoems n give me sum pointers n stuff much appreciated


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  • Abdul Basit (8/3/2006 9:18:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    i wanted to know about poetic metaphors because ive been longing for them 2 bcum one with my poetry....i want 2 know what they are and how you can develop them? ? any help wud b appreciated......

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    • Mary-Elizabeth Conn (8/13/2006 2:50:00 PM) Post reply

      Happy to try to help you Abdul! A poetic metaphor is something which is profoundly beautiful (eg. My love for you is deeper than deepest ocean) or really cutting (Another bear mauls my heart) . Basic ... more

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