Rohan Roy Comments

When is your birthday i need it for a school project.

Are you a violinist?

I love the football poem

I think these poems are brave attempts, with genuine thoughts: but for poetry it is not enough just to write down what you think or feel in lines that are cobbled together. It is not what you say, but how you say it - the ambiguities, the echoes, the implications, metaphors and similes that turn prose into poetry. e.g. in writing I prefer being/a born atheist the stress falls on the 'a' (making it mean 'just one? ') and doesn't work well except as prose; and also commits the narrator to a doubtful theory about the inheritance of acquired characteristics. As I say an ebullient beginning, but needs more work to acquire the skills developed by generations of English poets. I would suggest a careful study of poetic form and metre in English so as to make departures from it (if wanted) more relevant and positive, and less casual. Easy writing is bad reading.