This Emptiness Within Comments

exellent poem, i like this one i rate for this :)

it's already been said but, great poem, loved the play on words that show the mind trying to wrap itself around a life. cheers. ben

very thought provoking, reflective poem, with skillful play of words. yes, like Sadiq says, the emptiness within provokes us to live.10 thanks mamta

I agree with Sonny's prognosis. A very good play on words revealing a subtle profound message.

so serene, , , but is not the agitations inside provokes us to live? , , , thanx for sharing

I love the skillful word-play in your poem. I especially like the subtle word substitution in 'As far from perfection's existence/As from perfecting existence, ' as if to say that if perfection does indeed exist, then perhaps it is in the process of perfecting existence itself. Very compact, and complex, thoughts and structure.