The Deity Slid Its Feet Forward And Back Comments

Was 'one of their number' desiring His 'forgiveness' for the one's lack of understanding of that which the Deity spoke? ? bri ;) It's mostly a rhetorical question. ?

8 years since my first visit: (I will not read all of my first comment) 'sursurration': 'A soft, whispering or rustling sound; a murmur.' It's another new word to me. ;) brI

Also, in this present course of being, if your retina were to be stabbed Would you retrieve it from your spouse when you returned to Paradise? ......after reading these two lines i hesitated, read them again, and then kind of laughed....a bit out loud, but not too loudly - - - - - - - - - - - i believe you've fallen into the much-fallen-into trap of putting an apostrophe in its when it does not belong there: The Deity slid It's feet..... an apostrophe is needed in the contraction it's/it is. now i've read more and see you avoided the trap not long afterward. - - - - - - - - - - - - Definition of SUSURRATION : a whispering sound: murmur ................this word is new to me! thanks. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - I ALSO: I am in some confusion regarding what you have said, but i find this poem very amusing and cleverly done. it may lack a tiny bit here and there, but don't we all? ? ? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - my favorite lines from your poem may be: It collected a few mortal beings It had created Invented quilts and reclined in patches of shadow .....the second time i read them, i noticed invented and laughed again. :) - - - - - - - - - i liked that you capitalized It's and Its since you were referring to the God i used to believe in. what about the you in: Was that a fable, or are you, slyly, poking fun? ' i wonder if you deserves equal treatment. hmmmm? thanks for sharing. i shall send this to MyPoemList. i rarely look at the new poems list on the Home Page, but that is where i found this.