You are a diamond, so regally crowned,
sparkling with brilliance, always renowned.
In the eyes of the penniless, you gleam,
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Stand out lines specially for woman 'In every form, you shine, an everlasting light, bringing joy and wonder, by day or night.:
I think I'd much prefer a more colorful gem in my crown, ring, necklace, or etc. MY CROWN, usually only worn at home or at special parties, has rubies, sapphires, aquamarines, sapphires, and emeralds. A few pearls are nice. bri : )
stanza 7 is my LEAST LIKED (least-liked) stanza, esp. the use of 'sincere' at its end. I hope you revise THAT! Hm? ?
'EVERY heart's desire' is [[of course]] a stretch of the imagination. But, hey! , this is POETRY. : ) bri
I'd guess when Queen Elizabeth (RIP) rarely wore her crown, its weight from metal and jewels was (for her) a literal 'pain in the neck'. : )))
st.6: 'A gem of beauty, for others to admire, a symbol of strength, every heart's desire.' It's not (to me) perfectly clear if you mean 'every heart's desire' is a diamond or is 'strength'.
Regarding stanza 3: 'Rough or raw diamonds are uncut and unpolished gemstones that haven't been altered or tampered with after being discovered. Raw diamonds look like transparent stones with brownish or yellowish tints.'
(cont.) 'alas ə-lăs′ interjection Used to express sorrow, regret, grief, compassion, or apprehension of danger or evil.'
stanza 2: well thought and expressed ...However, a 'penniless' person might wish more for a good meal once a day. : ( Alas, the inequity on this planet. (cont.)
line 1: I think I'd add 'ring' after 'diamond'. Otherwise it sounds like a diamond is crowned by a diamond. THAT would be like saying: 'BRI's (poetic) BRI-lliance is BRI-lliant.'
I know Diamond is precious and costly. It has the light of its own to shine at night, I liked your ode which explains the quality, value and its importance.
Every heart yeans Diamond, if not in actual at least symbolical.