i was laying beneath a big pine tree
the birds were whistling cheerfully.
the cool gentle breeze blowing thru my hair
and i knew right there, i had not one care.
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A beaitiful images. Thanks for sharing such a simple and vivde piece of poem
This poem took me by surprise, I wasn't expecting that but it showed the astral travel, outside of the body and moving on and I find that quite delightful Louis.....
A very deep and moving write. Made me sit up and pay attention. A black squirrel with red eyes. Spiritually enlightening.
I liked the part about the strange squirrel and seeing your body on the ground. Nature distorted and out of body experience, transcending.
I wasn't expecting the near death experience at the end... Wonderful poem. You actually gave me a start.
that's when i realized that i was dead. i had no form, no shape, no sound i was above myself looking down..oh dreadful experience and one can only have after death.... beautful words and fine expression abd being dead.. i loved it....10 read mine samsher(sword) ... no advice please....fishing in troubled water...nothing before time
bneautiful.beautiful in death.very interesting poem. voted10 surya
Love the surprise ending. You give a feeling of being in heaven, then find out you are. Perfect
an after death poem...lovely imagination...superb flow...10
A lovely flashback.Whatever it is is about nature and wild creatures in nature we are brought to our senses in a most profound way by the wonder of an encounter like this. We feel so connected for a few brief moments and the animal or creature from the wild seems to be equally surprised and to benefit as well from the experience.It's as if a broken circle was complete again.
The feel was good in this poem but not the kind of free spirit I was expecting.
not the kind of free spirit i was expecting.. but hey...way back then you had the gift.
The imagery is wonderful and the flow and rhythm just flows. Loved it