Sunday, August 30, 2009

************ Free Spirit**********1979 Comments

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i was laying beneath a big pine tree
the birds were whistling cheerfully.
the cool gentle breeze blowing thru my hair
and i knew right there, i had not one care.
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louis rams
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Lee Boueri 12 November 2019

The imagery is wonderful and the flow and rhythm just flows. Loved it

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A B Faniki 31 August 2019

A beaitiful images. Thanks for sharing such a simple and vivde piece of poem

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Melvina Germain 07 August 2015

This poem took me by surprise, I wasn't expecting that but it showed the astral travel, outside of the body and moving on and I find that quite delightful Louis.....

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Louis Rams 09 August 2015

your thoughts and words are beautiful - thank you

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Patricia Grantham 08 November 2014

A very deep and moving write. Made me sit up and pay attention. A black squirrel with red eyes. Spiritually enlightening.

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Earl Clark 09 September 2010

I liked the part about the strange squirrel and seeing your body on the ground. Nature distorted and out of body experience, transcending.

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Loved your poem. Caught my attention.

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Rachel Butler 04 November 2009

'I had no form, no shape, no sound' Rachel Ann Butler

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Scott Daniels 28 September 2009

I wasn't expecting the near death experience at the end... Wonderful poem. You actually gave me a start.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 08 September 2009

that's when i realized that i was dead. i had no form, no shape, no sound i was above myself looking down..oh dreadful experience and one can only have after death.... beautful words and fine expression abd being dead.. i loved it....10 read mine samsher(sword) ... no advice please....fishing in troubled water...nothing before time

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Surya . 07 September 2009

bneautiful.beautiful in death.very interesting poem. voted10 surya

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Christine Kerr 05 September 2009

Love the surprise ending. You give a feeling of being in heaven, then find out you are. Perfect

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Samanyan Lakshminarayanan 01 September 2009

an after death poem...lovely imagination...superb flow...10

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Matt Mooney 01 September 2009

A lovely flashback.Whatever it is is about nature and wild creatures in nature we are brought to our senses in a most profound way by the wonder of an encounter like this. We feel so connected for a few brief moments and the animal or creature from the wild seems to be equally surprised and to benefit as well from the experience.It's as if a broken circle was complete again.

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Kranthi Pothineni 31 August 2009

The feel was good in this poem but not the kind of free spirit I was expecting.

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not the kind of free spirit i was expecting.. but hey...way back then you had the gift.

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