Eternal Darkness (C) 8-6-08 Comments

very good write. i can totally realate to this piece. at times we get warped in a pit of despair. the walls of the world start to close in on us and we are trapped, helpness, not knowing who to turn to. great job

A Very Talented Write... The Storyline Was Riveting, Each Verse Flowed Rhythmically, The Words A Delight To Read... Also, The Emotions Swirled Around Each Word... (Especially, The Part About Leaving Love, To Find Light) I Really Enjoyed It... Forgot to vote, but will go back and give it a big '10'... Keep 'Em Coming Kiddo... Poet Friend, MoonBee

I love the raw pain and It was just amazing I feel the same way a lot.

Ohhhh.....I love this peom. The darkness and emotion in this poem makes me feel so.....broken and free. Emo boys are the men after my own heart eternally.

I liked the dark feeling in your poem.I think this one is way better then the 1 one.Anyway maybe you could improve the structure a bit.

corey, i have a poem like that too, we right words but it doesnt mean they define or confine what we are... nice read... thank you

A deep and dark poem Corey - nice write. See my similar poems of darkness: My sneaking Tears and Ocean of Pain Regards Mark

very deep and touching...........read mine two in the morning.......on the same lines....well penned