shakil ahmed

shakil ahmed

Badarpur, Assam, India.
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shakil ahmed
Badarpur, Assam, India.
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Wednesday, November 4, 2009

Alone Comments

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Alone, alone, alone
I was all alone
I was alone in my mother’s womb
I will be alone in my grave beneath the tomb
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Dr Dillip K Swain 17 September 2018

She comes in my vision She speaks, she loves, she atones… I feel her love, touch her fragrant Jones, I quench my thirst of hungry heart.....fascinating expression! An adorable piece of poetry! (10)

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Richard Wlodarski 30 September 2017

Shakil, you've done an excellent job with this heart-wrenching poem. You've captured the essence of aloneness VS loneliness. As a reader, I was able to sincerely feel your aloneness. Excellent write! Thank you for inviting me to your poetry page.

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Nosheen Irfan 31 May 2016

Very heart-touching poem on loneliness. You have described your lonely journey in a very smooth flow of words. Well-worded n well-conceived work.

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Sahra Hussein 05 March 2016

This is very beautiful poem it really heart Good work! !

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Anzelyne Shideshe 08 February 2016

Emotional poem loneliness a nightmare in life.keep on writing.

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Ersin Uyanik 16 December 2015

yes, we are all alone in this journey shakil. it started alone and will be end alone as well. sad and beautiful story over here. thanks! Many battles of life together we fought Suddenly a gushing wind blowing over the land Swept her away who was my only friend

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Sari Mavi 13 December 2015

i like this poem is very expressive. thanks for sharing

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Geeta Radhakrishna Menon 05 December 2015

Yes, we are born alone and die too alone. But the period between life and death, if we find love, then love becomes our companion. But when this love is gone or lost, then again, it is a state of misery and loneliness. An emotional poem so well portrayed and worded. Thank you Shakil for this intense poem.

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Brian Johnston 14 November 2015

Well this is the first poem I've read of yours Shakil and while your feelings of loneliness are poignant, I do hope that you are moving on in your life. The poem does lack a kind of musicality though, a rhythm, that one other noticed too. One of my goals in writing poetry is to try to make the poem sound conversational as well so that the rhymes do not stand out so strongly. A line like Many battles of life together we fought is a non natural arrangement of a sentence just to make it easier for you to rhyme. I think your poem would be better if you tried to avoid such constructions. I would also advise you to perhaps spend more time resting with your poem before releasing it. It is tempting to publish sometimes to early because we get caught up in the emotion of our own work. This poem show signs of being near to a first draft. When I finish the first draft of a poem, I call it the 'Gift of the muse and do not really consider to be my own poem until I have rewritten most of it. You will be amazed I think at how much better a poem will be if you force yourself to rewrite with a a regular rhyme scheme and use a rhythm that stays through the whole poem. These disciples are a great aid as well in helping you to think about different and perhaps better ways of saying the same thing! in any case, please keep writing. You definitely show talent.

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Gerry Legister 14 November 2015

I love the first stanza, I will be alone in my grave...excellent work

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Domes Wau 12 November 2015

I am speechless how great you wrote a nice expression of this poem. I like it and thank you for sharing

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Jeri Martindale 10 November 2015

such a beautiful poem expressing how it feels to lose a love, and still own the love! it sucked me in deeply

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Pamela Sinicrope 09 November 2015

This is a lovely heartfelt poem. Its very expressively written and leaves me feeling sad....and alone. You pulled me into your poem from the first lines...setting the stage for being alone most of the time from conception and beyond. Thanks for sharing your poem!

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Jaishree Nair 30 October 2015

A beautiful poem expounding the immortality of love.Enjoyed the shuffling of vocabulary to express a fragile theme. Thanks for sharing

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Jhadeswar Khanda 30 October 2015

a amazing poem brother. I don't get language to describe my enjoyment about this poem

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Muhammad Ali 27 October 2015

If I say, you again departed and make the millions alone. A nice and sad poem Shakeel bro.

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Kanniappan Kanniappan 25 October 2015

Hi Shakil, I read your poem ' Alone'. It is really very interesting! to be alone is really very sad; I like the rhyming which is very good!

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Sumit Ganguly 20 October 2015

A beautiful poem. It refers to eternal truth and love.

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Gangadharan Nair Pulingat 18 October 2015

The poet expresses the feeling of death in great expressions in this poem..

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Vishal Sharma 17 October 2015

life is just an illusion with whom you are today would leave you tomorrow just we have to do what we are meant to do

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