Sunday, March 16, 2008

03/16/2008 Broken B ♥ Comments

Rating: 5.0

It's been torn out my veins still pumping,
He's holding it in his hands still thumping.
His name has been engraved so deep,
I just sit there close my eyes and weep.
...
Read full text

Coreena Dejesus
Rate this poem:
COMMENTS
Lynda Robson 27 March 2008

A heartfelt poem (excuse the pun) full of emotion and pain, very well written, Lynda xx

0 0 Reply
Malini Kadir 27 March 2008

pain excruciating pain well expressed! a warm hug hems

0 0 Reply
Sandra Fowler 25 March 2008

Very strong emotions, vividly expressed. Thank you for sharing. Warm regards, Sandra

0 0 Reply
Rani Turton 25 March 2008

Rather startling images but the pain does get through to the reader.

0 0 Reply
Aashish Ameya 24 March 2008

good one....but pain is the reality of life...have you seen Cinema paradiso?

0 0 Reply
Jibin Joseph 21 March 2008

how lonely we feel when our love is lost great write thanks for sharing peace jibin

0 0 Reply
Dr.subhendu Kar 16 March 2008

heart when broken by blow of hand tears as flow across the sorrow blood when oozes into the rhymes green secret of all sacreds when pierced by the arrows.........really hurtful love being apart, well penned, i admire,10/10, thanks for sharing

0 0 Reply
Vidyadhar Durgekar 16 March 2008

deep emotions of life and love..........I liked it

0 0 Reply
Coreena Dejesus

Coreena Dejesus

USA (Born in MA) (Raised in MI)
Close
Error Success