Our Love Was. Poem by JOSE MURGUIA

Our Love Was.

Rating: 4.9


our love was like a fish out the sea,
like a blind person who couldn't see,
like a star that was no longer bright,
our love was a struggling fight

our love was like a dove who could't fly,
like the ocean that went dry,
like a sun with out the shine,
i remember you once were mine

our love was just a moment in time,
our love i believe was a crime,
our love was, our love is?
our love should have never been like this........

1/14/2009
Copyright ©2009 Jose Murguia

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Smith 17 January 2009

Beautifully written, great rhythm and flow to the peice. Job well done! :)

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Sunand Sharma 17 January 2009

Differnt view to describe love...words are simple and touching...great work..! ! !

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Dark Gurl 55 18 January 2009

OoHh..! amazing poem i swear.. where did u get this from..? !

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Argenis Hernandez 18 January 2009

my fingers snap throughout this poem. well done

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Dolan Doran 18 January 2009

it has an interesting beat to it. good similes...

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Cynthia Ulloa 02 January 2010

i love this! ! beautiful writing. la verdad. :)

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Mahsa Mahdavi 24 September 2009

your way of writing is facsinating.never stop writing.This poem was nice too...

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C. P. Sharma 14 February 2009

Good rhyme, rhythm and flow but narrow focus on love. CP

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Kelli Richards 13 February 2009

i love how you compare love to these different things.

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Kranthi Pothineni 13 February 2009

A very good flow of feel and expressions...very good lines

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