Your Eyes-The Eighth Ocean, (Part 1) Poem by Vishal Sharma

Your Eyes-The Eighth Ocean, (Part 1)

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Gentle mild winds make silent music in the ears of sea
And I think they are singing the song of you and me
I, your lonely lover leading my life leaving all my pain,
and, you a fair angel of my often midnight lovely strain.

Ask these gentle winds, question these loves skies,
A lover heart is crying, my love is higher than their heights.
You have got the lovely pair of sea within the silver casket,
the deep blue eyes is responsible-have put my heart in your basket.

Seas are know by the waters that are salty and sour
Gazing your God's wonder daily, I spend my hour
you are the queen of innocence, the master of your fate
Baby! This bard is crying, accept me untill its too late.

A lovely deep face spilling out all your innosence
that gradually increases on my every lovely glance,
Your eyes has taken away my countless sleeps
On my own life, I have lost my lovely grip

Your eyes do wonders and credit goes to you
A pair of goddess eyes, you have, believe it or not, thats true.

Monday, September 9, 2013
Topic(s) of this poem: love and art
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Laurel Vijitha ... 10 September 2013

are maar dal diya tune! ! jo bhi teri gf hogi lucky hein bahoth! ! ithni achi poems likthe kese ho tum they r just awsm! !

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Aman Arora 10 September 2013

Good job, nice rhythm and flow. In the 5th line, I think it should be either a lover's heart is crying or a lovely heart is crying. Or maybe putting an hyphen between lover and heart would do. Consult someone on this.

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Abhishek Mishra 10 September 2013

what can I say about you...you are indian version (or avatar whatever you say) of John keats yar: -) your poetry work always brings a smile on my face, you are just amazing. I would suggest you to think about publishing your own poetry book..what you say?

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