survi sharma


Wind - Poem by survi sharma

My thoughts lay printed on sheets of paper.
stored in the drawer of my mind.
They are organised, neat,
nothing out of that place.

They can't be touched by outside's strangers
filled with danger and cruel intensions,
I am the only one with the key.
To this infinite drawer with ideas.

But, sometimes a foreign gust of wind comes,
it rattles and shakes the knob of the drawer,
each day getting stronger and stronger,
closer and closer to freeing those papers.

the enemy, the wind is a master of uncovering
of daintly covering out of my papers
like dandelions on a vast field,
to blow and disperse the seeds to unknown areas.


Comments about Wind by survi sharma

  • Rookie - 21 Points Raabia Tabassum (9/29/2013 5:51:00 AM)

    Good. I wish you all the best for the contest. Do take time to read my poem.

    http: //poemhunter.com/contest-vote/the-rain-knocks-on-my-window/ (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 5,860 Points Veeraiyah Subbulakshmi (8/19/2013 11:27:00 PM)

    nice to read..survi sgarna.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 40 Points Kinjal Sharma (8/8/2013 3:20:00 AM)

    nice poem and the image created is just awesome one (Report) Reply

  • Rookie ~ Jenie~ (7/26/2013 3:18:00 AM)

    love your poems very very much
    heart touching one... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anamika Jalan (7/25/2013 1:12:00 PM)

    mindblowing and heart sizzling piece of writing
    a very talented and awesome poem to read (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,214 Points Bri Edwards (7/18/2013 10:30:00 PM)

    out of that place. [i would write out of place....or...out of its place]
    intensions, [the spelling is intentions, at least here in u.s.; we do have the word tension(s): aren't languages difficult! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ? ]

    AND: am i being a pest? ? as for the last four lines, especially the first two of the last four:

    the enemy, the wind is a master of uncovering
    of daintly covering out of my papers
    like dandelions on a vast field,
    to blow and disperse the seeds to unknown areas.

    i'm not familiar with daintly, though i know daintily and dainty. when i typed that preceding sentence my computer unlined daintly in red. and when i googled daintly i was confused by what i read.
    if you want to know more of what i dislike about those four lines, please ask me. sorry if anybody doesn't like what i just wrote.
    AS FOR THE CRAFT AND MESSAGE OF THE POEM before the last four lines. i thought it was fantastic. i liked the comparison to a drawer etc. i'm glad a wind blew the poem my way. thanks for sharing. :) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,663 Points Hazel Durham (7/18/2013 4:11:00 AM)

    Original write your thoughts can be disclosed by strong winds, just perfect! ! (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,972 Points David Wood (7/17/2013 1:34:00 PM)

    This is an interesting poem with vivid imagery. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,231 Points Valerie Dohren (7/17/2013 12:38:00 PM)

    Interesting write, novel, and well penned. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,101 Points Heather Wilkins (7/15/2013 3:43:00 PM)

    the winds of time blow again and again. nice write (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ankit Sharma (7/13/2013 2:06:00 AM)

    great one
    i love it purely (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 524 Points Vizard Dhawan (7/12/2013 2:46:00 PM)

    windy THOUght
    love the poem by heart (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,201 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (7/11/2013 10:59:00 AM)

    The wind blows the dandelion seeds of stored papers. Beautiful. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,447 Points Ken E Hall (7/11/2013 3:33:00 AM)

    Original look at the inner mind of self only the strong willed will keep the order from being blown astray...regards (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,295 Points Tarobinson1103@gmail.com Robinson (7/11/2013 2:34:00 AM)

    I think they will be safe
    until you let the wind within. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 339 Points Vipins Puthooran (7/10/2013 1:22:00 PM)

    infinite drawer with ideas/ poetic/ good poem! ! ! ! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 613 Points Nasarudheen Parameswaran (7/10/2013 12:31:00 PM)

    Well, the words of the poets are like seeds for future(so said P.B.Shelley, a revolutionary romantic poet) .I was checking your key; then found a poem.Very interesting one.Please write more. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 187 Points Jenie Franksay (7/8/2013 6:07:00 AM)

    nice poem di.
    i like it. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, July 8, 2013

Poem Edited: Monday, August 12, 2013


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