When She's Around Poem by Goodenough Sakhile Dlamini

When She's Around

Rating: 5.0


When she is around
I wasn't aware, but she smile while I am watching her
As I turn back my thoughts she is cute…
Even if she is saying the strongest word you ever had.
I discovered that I am sweating when I am talking to her
Oh no! Her beauty makes me forget every sad stories
Her availability around, makes my life be a round like earth
Even if I don't have time, to her I am free I got nothing to do
Only just to watch her smiling, walking, talking
What about breathing…I don't want to be a stocker
, I wish she is mine already; At least I can be a rocker…
To rock her life like soccer
Oh no! I even forget that I have a class
That what I was saying, when she is around
I loose what I was prepared to say…
If you can ask me what she was saying, I don't know
Because I wasn't listening to her that much
But I was watching that beauty of dark fresh women in front of my eyes

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
watching a lovely gal..iam trying to show her how much i love her
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Chime Justice Ndubuisi 14 June 2012

I think you need to revisit this poem, perhaps, reread it again so as to enable you make corrections. In other words, find someone else to read your works for you before publishing it. It works for me. Apart from the above, it's a very nice piece. Keep it up.

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