What Happens To Smiles Poem by Brittney Miller

What Happens To Smiles



What happens to a smile
dose it fade away
like lost memories
or is it always ready to peak again
and then take over
dose it go away like loved ones
or does it stay forever
like mother in laws
maybe it comes and go
like the winter snow
maybe it could stop violence
like a police badge
or dose it disappear forever like lost hope

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Edmund Wong 02 October 2012

This is a great one, full of rich, original, provocative, entertaining similes. Without mentioning explicitly what you are feeling, you leave the reader wondering about it. Everything looks great except the last line, which is a bit cliche and anticlimatic. If you can rework that it will be perfect.

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Adens Kamwi 30 December 2009

oh wow you really are as good as i thought

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