Cretan Maineiac

Rookie - 2 Points (April 29,1961 / Lewiston, ME USA)

Water Lily I Met At Work


No thorns, limbs sashay longly, cheetah
walk toward
no prey, footloose, her dark blond hair

streaming, no intrusion. (Beer) 'Could I've
one? ' No
harm. 'Lotsa' people hang

out here.' No blame. (Smoke)
'Peace, ' she said,
in Chrystal clear Downeast, an aroma eluding words, &

a smile that lights a soggy
joint. 'Peace, '
she says, again,

long as she looks past the sniffing. '...I
don't think I've ever
voted... [T]here's a pebble in my shoe...' (and those

feet!) , nature jealously scraping along
her only
tan-less feature, limnable as last year's hangups.

She turns twenty-nine today,
loved me watch her walk away.

Submitted: Wednesday, July 11, 2007
Edited: Sunday, March 20, 2011

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Comments about this poem (Water Lily I Met At Work by Cretan Maineiac )

  • Rookie - 0 Points Patricia Gale (10/15/2007 8:04:00 PM)

    Ah... nothing like watching or being watched..lol Loved it! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Cheryl Lynn Moyer-peele (7/27/2007 9:11:00 AM)

    Chris (Not Cretan or whatever other enigma you've chosen) -

    This weaving of text and subtext, is amazing and your release was perfect. If you had willed it, she would have looked back!

    Best wishes - Cheryl (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Tara very irritated with PH injustice (7/20/2007 7:07:00 AM)

    Oh, what a brilliant ending. Yeh, it's good to be watched. :) t x (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,020 Points Peter Stavropoulos (7/16/2007 7:53:00 PM)

    I enjoyed reading this poem. It's complex, witty, says alot. Hope you enjoy work. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anna Russell (7/13/2007 3:24:00 PM)

    I really enjoyed this Chris and I love the way you've laid it out, making every single word count, and each sentence take on different meaning depending on how you read it. Top notch old chap (I have no idea why I just said that)
    Hugs
    Anna xxx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ted Sheridan (7/11/2007 10:53:00 PM)

    I'll drink to her and her second cousin. (Report) Reply

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