Waiting To Die Poem by Pablo Cruise
Waiting To Die
Callused spirit in declining coil
Bended back as if he knows
Skin creased from fended toil
A cane to stress the pose
Face to caution any greeting
Eyes that shift the blame
His soul controls the beating,
Of a heart that renders a list of shame
In a mind engaged in yesterday
He reasons through the lies
That pride continues to betray,
Up until the day he dies
The devil’s claim long since given
For remorse will never reign
On these shoulders the consequence is driven
Anticipates his failed veins
Slow record through harried eyes
Soles fall flat in all his debris
The present mocks a disregarded demise
Reflected glances to remind it’s me
I thought this was a powerful poem and well penned with some excellent poetic lines. Jim
Beautiful flow to this, powerful piece, you are an excellent poet Pablo, 10 Lynda xx
beautiful poem though you have changed the form of rhyming in the last two stanzas, thanks for sharing
a powerful and poignant depiction of the struggle of coming face to face with our mortality
I just wanted to reiterate again, on how much I loved this poem of yours. Pretty darned good. An excellent write! God bless us all-MJG.
Great write. Yes, an added s on the end of the word (Reign) would most likely make that line rhyme much better. Still, a great master piece! God bless the artist-MJG.
What we should properly understand is that past is afterall past. Let us not experience it emotionally but only as a witness. With this guideline, our life is in safe waters. Why should we feel being guilty? Our short comings are only the outcome of an immature mind. Our life is a big journey towards maturity. This means that at any given moment we are mature but when it comes to our reflecting about it, we may tend to feel that it was a case of immaturity. When we were in LKG, we collected pebbles but when we were in 10th class, we collected stamps. Both are perfect actions from their own point of view. This is what we have to realise.
Hi! I get the miseries and write a lot of pieces about it.I like your wording.
Very good. It's described in an beautiful and rythmic way. well done i love it.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/19/2024 5:28:18 AM # 1.0.0.1119
Rhymed and rhythmic poetry.......pleasant to read...