Vanishing Eyes Poem by Amir Foroughi

Vanishing Eyes

Rating: 5.0


I saw your shaft on the water
So empty was the depth
I touched the beauty
Which was torn in me

So long dark nights I had
With you in joy or sad
Kissing the land of myths
Rising the soddomies of love

I saw your shaft on the water
For a while she has disappeared
Maybe feared
Of me, a wicked outlaw

You soar from the water into my heart
You are naked in me as I am
The moon will cry to her emptiness
You are with whole life and gods in me

I saw your shaft on the water of my eyes
For she will never rise

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ch J Satyananda Kumar 16 June 2009

Very good.................................................

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Cristina Teodor 06 October 2011

Passion, intensity of love at a higher level of human understanding.Well written..Cristina Teodor

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Sofia Darling 27 April 2011

i really like everythign about this poem, its beautiful in its own way. its so deep, and has a lot of meaning, i am impressed, realllyy :)

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Budlea Ní Mhaolfhábhail 24 November 2009

Oh yes, a 10 definitely from me....in gratitude.: -) Ruth

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Budlea Ní Mhaolfhábhail 24 November 2009

I touched the beauty That was torn in me.... These, among other lines in this poem (well in fact the entire poem) is powerfully composed, regular and yet full of extreme passion and sadness. I wonder at the intensity of your emotions here and yet, you do create an atmosphere of reality. Many people feel this sadness although there seems to be an added dimension to yours. Wonderful poem Amir, Wonderful! ! : -) Thank you for sharing... Ruth Lavelle

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So long dark nights I had With you in joy or sad Kissing the land of myths Rising the soddomies of love... intense love in writing of poems.. god write.... read mine dead nights and miss i miss u and mary to marry..cpmment

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