Unusual Scene Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Unusual Scene

Rating: 5.0


Frightening sound on tree form owl,
Was it the systematic retreat or withdrawal?
Something unusual was taking place,
Was it for supremacy or scene replaced?

Whatever was happening really not good sign?
Preference more to stay calm and resign,
Why all indications not showing enthusiasm?
Panic more and leading not to realism,

When faced with very bad situation?
Inner conscious revolt and many questions,
Wisdom and innocence doesn’t augur well,
Seems all against and life living hell,

When you are facing danger and bad luck,
Fate will be against and people ready to suck
All moves backfire and result in zero,
Thought you may be brave but never a hero,

Friends and relatives will desert the scene,
Who were so close will never be seen,
Avoiding audience and not eager or keen,
Such situation I never faced or been,

I learned a lot from setback or failure,
Met with defeat where success was sure,
How I take it coming and others assure,
Never to loose hope I made doubly assure

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 08 February 2014

Frightening sound on tree form owl, ..............from owl? Never to loose hope I made doubly assure...............: lose, not loose AND i would use doubly sure not assure for TWO reasons: 1. i believe sure is correct; it is what i, a longtime native-speaker of english would use rather than assure 2. to me it is bad enough to rhyme sure with assure, but it is worse to rhyme assure with assure. it is 'nice' that you write in english and the hindi-speaking readers may love your stuff, but i'm afraid it is not for me. thanks for sharing. bri :)

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Excellent poem well penned.10.

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Catrina Heart 11 July 2009

I learned a lot from setback or failure, Met with defeat where success was sure, How I take it coming and others assure, Never to loose hope I made doubly assure ----- wow! ! ! fantastic and kind poetic advice...well done finale with meaningful theme! ! ! 10+++

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India
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