Treasure Island

Nika McGuin

(12/01/89 - present / Louisiana)

Under The Sun Thoughts Wander


Walking home,
I've got sun in my eyes.
It's got me in its heat-filled gaze.
People walk by, following them my mind wanders,
as I wonder, what they think when they see me.
Do they really see me, like the sun does?
What do they think about me,
a stranger to their palates?
They probably don't even think about me,
not quite like I think about them.
No doubt, they see just my furrowed brow,
squinting eyes, and my hair -
a tad too poofy today.
I don't know,
I just wonder
as I wander home.

Submitted: Monday, February 24, 2014
Edited: Wednesday, February 26, 2014

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Wrote this on the back of my receipt as I walked home today.

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  • Daniel Brick (7/10/2014 6:27:00 PM)

    Hi Nika I have been trolling through familiar poets looking at their poems of the season; I am in dire need of outside inspiration! My latest poems I believe have used up my purely inner resources. Do you know that feeling? Of course, it may be just another form of Writer's Block, but I usually avoid that word. I like the image which opens this poem - I'VE GOT THE SUN IN MY EYES. / IT'S GOT ME IN ITS HEAT-FILLED GAZE. I like the way you show yourself (tiny human being) and the sun (big celestial object) doing the same thing, namely looking at the other. Maybe I can build on that... The sun's always a good starting point. (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (3/2/2014 1:30:00 AM)

    Nika... this is the beautiful expression of a casual moment and there is an air of casualness about the whole poem! You wonder what are the fleeting thoughts of other people... and through what grid they look at you! You seem to have some negativity about your appearance...'.your furrowed brow.. your squinting eye'! I tell you.... appearance has nothing to do with a person's merit... If those strangers had read your poems, I am sure they would have looked upon you with a sense of awe! Great write! ! (Report) Reply

  • Daniel Brick (2/28/2014 6:27:00 AM)

    I love the word - POOFY to describe your hair. I hope I can sometime use that word in a poem! This poem does two things for me: first, it captures the wonderful experience of walking outside on a beautiful day, when the sun is shining just right - it's not oppressively hot, rather soothingly warm. This sensory experience is vivid and satisfying by itself. But I know from reading your poems that there will be another dimension beyond the sensory. And so the second aspect of the poem is your reflection on other people's views of you. This echoes the concern with negative judgments in your poem THE SMALL CHILD, but here it doesn't cause stress, rather just puzzlement that people rush to judgments. Thankfully, that thought can spoil the others as both you and the reader enjoy wandering on a blessed, sunny day! (Report) Reply

  • Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (2/26/2014 10:21:00 AM)

    Very insightful..........Nika....when you say I wonder when my mind wanders......and I have got sun in my eyes.......
    beautiful lines indeed....I loved it (Report) Reply

  • Ed Nigma (2/25/2014 3:54:00 PM)

    I've always loved the lines wondering as your wandering and vice versa. Pretty good for writing it on a receipt on the way home. You must have drawers full or poetical receipts by now? =P Nicely done as usual love your poems!

    Allan Gerard~ (Report) Reply

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