Turning Off The Flame Poem by Stevie Taite

Turning Off The Flame

Rating: 5.0


I left you simmering, surface Undulation
Mustn't boil over, refrain
A 'burn in hell' type revelation
My conscience turned off the flame

How could something barely amalgamated
Meal uneaten, Luke warm
Leave my heart this strangulated
Aching, throbbing, torn.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Asif Andalib 18 November 2012

Awesome. Beautiful expression, nice flow and rhyme

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Alla Simone 19 November 2012

Second stanza is amazing. Raw emotion and truth expressed eloquently throughout though (barely amalgamated, strangulated) . Also love the metaphor of an uneaten meal. It's universally appealing/understood. Going on my favorites list.

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Tiger Lily Love 10 December 2012

I LOVED this! The general feeling portrayed: heartache. I feeling I know well. You did and outstanding job at capturing that in this poem in a very raw way. And in harmony Thomas the heart wants what he heart wants....even what is worst for it'

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Valsa George 03 December 2012

Wonderful expressions! Great comparison! Leaves the heart aching, throbbing and torn! !

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Valerie Dohren 21 November 2012

Great analogy Stevie. Very clever write.

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Aria Siren 20 November 2012

Oooooh this has left me pondering and prosing. I love well thought out wording and the rawness to it. I would tell you my favourite part but I wouldn't know what to choose-the whole thing is amazing. It's reflective, wise and painful all at once-as memories often are.

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Kelly Seale 19 November 2012

Stevie, Just read this... And I love it of course... it's inner-meaning, has my head all abuzz... -a momentery lasp in judgment? -a regrettable indiscretion perhaps... no matter, Loving your metaphoric revelations! Great Ink Stevie! ; -) -Kelly.

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