Midnights Voice

Freshman - 1,115 Points (November 3,1950 / Selma, Alabama)

To a Promise


I used to live by the sea
full of manta rays, jelly fish, and sharks
Loved to watch the sun set across the way
Across the way, the separation
That comes on the way after dark

Stark the feeling as the fire burns
and you begin to sway
Your naked body I cannot see
as you dance away
Just the stars up above and far away

It is here today, tomorrow,
in the flickering flames displayed

I am thinking of yesterday
so you put my hand on your belly
And say, ''yes, yesterday ''
and, ''Yes to tomorrow.''

Submitted: Tuesday, September 24, 2013
Edited: Wednesday, September 25, 2013

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  • Rookie - 123 Points marvin brato (10/28/2013 2:49:00 AM)

    True love lingers beyond time and space! Wonderful expression, indeed! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 2 Points Louis Cecile (10/6/2013 4:26:00 AM)

    The transition of day and time is well executed from the beginning verse and the whole purpose of the poem is explained at the end. Yes to this time and the present. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 7,260 Points Neela Nath (10/5/2013 10:33:00 AM)

    Despondency is the underlying tune.But, the music of hope is ringing nicely. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 4 Points Nader Baheri (10/5/2013 4:23:00 AM)

    i like the way this poem flows.thinking about tomorrow, the past is past.~nb (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Lindsey Ansbro (10/3/2013 10:10:00 PM)

    Great poem sir. Enjoyable to read. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 41 Points Jr Cuyam (10/1/2013 6:52:00 AM)

    So sweet and of hope...well penned sir (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 2,247 Points Vera Sidhwa (9/30/2013 5:44:00 PM)

    The sea sounds so interesting but to watch the sunset across the way, sounds philosophical. ten of ten Mr. Robinson (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 603 Points Shahzia Batool (9/29/2013 11:38:00 PM)

    Not caring for the boundaries of the starting and ending the thoughts as well as the Time are getting blended together like the waves of the sea...it is imaginative, it is descriptive, it is scenic, it is beautiful, and it is, as Mr. Nair said...what not! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,104 Points Valsa George (9/29/2013 6:48:00 AM)

    As the sun draws a separation between day and night, there is a separation between yesterday and tomorrow, but everything is interlinked as our memories are! The sea side scene is beautiful! ! Enjoyed this lovely write! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 4,614 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (9/28/2013 7:09:00 PM)

    Today is the separation felt. Yesterday was great. Hope tomorrow will be like yesterday. Beautiful poem with deep love expressed. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Farah Ilyas (9/27/2013 1:16:00 PM)

    too enchanted poem, spell of love attracts more like ur poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 149 Points Laurie X3 (9/26/2013 6:27:00 PM)

    Youe insights did make this more beautiful. But each time I read it, still hard to not take it literal. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 93 Points Payal Parande (9/26/2013 10:39:00 AM)

    the beautiful memories are like the dream that came true without even dreaming about it....what a beautiful piece written by a beautiful hearted poet (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,236 Points Noreen Carden (9/26/2013 8:02:00 AM)

    Hi Thomas a great poem lovely read (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 16 Points Abhishek Mishra (9/26/2013 7:13:00 AM)

    Fantastic poem..worth reading it: -) (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,554 Points Dinesh Nair (9/26/2013 6:53:00 AM)

    You Thomas and Laurie X3 have a great past to reflect upon and I thank Thomas for granting another chance to read about life of adventure and what not.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 149 Points Laurie X3 (9/25/2013 6:35:00 PM)

    When I was 18 I spent my new freedom like a kid with a dollar buying penny candy. Two months I slept by the Atlantic after work and play......I love the sound of the water.....clothes on, no fire....but there was dancing......the memories this poem invokes are many. Sounds like a sweet promise.....for the love of trees.... (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 9,695 Points Heather Wilkins (9/25/2013 11:35:00 AM)

    its good to think of yesterday. sometimes we get caught up in it. lovely poem (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 2,438 Points Dave Walker (9/25/2013 11:29:00 AM)

    Sometimes it's good to look back at yesterday, a great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 26,969 Points Gajanan Mishra (9/24/2013 9:15:00 PM)

    watch the sun across the way, good write, thanks. (Report) Reply

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