Tit For Tat Poem by Herbert Nehrlich

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well, to my mind, the revision improves the whole tone of the poem. you now have a children's poem worthy of Roald Dahl (if I have actually spelt his name correctly, that would be a first) and reminiscent of the tone of The Brothers Grimm's fables, which I think are great. nice work, Herbert.

In a rare moment of openmindedness, I have revised it. H

A. Koninberg, Your right. This reminds me of kindof dirty Silverstein. So easy to write this kind of thing, just turn off brain and start rhyming. I like prayer mat tho. PS

I put it on the forum...most people were disinterested but Mr. Shepherd said it was reminiscent of the children's work of Shel Silverstein. I thought it was like a amalgamation of Edward Lear and Dr. Seuss. I'd lose the 'skat' and iron out the crinkles and you have the basis of a child's poem...the removal of the word 'shat' would make it work for children...otherwise, you are stuck with a poem that is too immature for adults and not suitable for children, which would be a shame as I am in agreement with Michael that this poem has the basis of a decent children's poem, if slightly amended.

there is nothing better then a poem about a puddy tat i love them especially from a decent poet what a great job herbert i got a laugh out of this a great play of words and flow stick it in the forum for carter to have a look at get him to read it to his wife before bedtime Warm regards allan