Thoughts Poem by Artistic Perspective

Thoughts



Thoughts
By: Artistic Perspective
September 15,2009
Age 12

(This is not actually about me.)

I don't know why I judge myself,
I don't know why I desire wealth.
Is it because of all the other expectations people have?
I don't know.
You might think like me; you may or may not.
But if I don't, I tend to find myself in a knot.
Do I care what other people think?
Maybe so, I may just be on the brink.
Do my thoughts matter at all?
I daren't think about that; I may just brawl.
I don't know whose thoughts I'm thinking,
I hope I'll start the day right if I start winking. ;)

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Timothy Venard 17 September 2009

very good - nice theme very interesting thorts - be carfull not miss parts out to mke things rhym, like 'the brink' - we dont know what ur on the brink of. rhym is very difficult, and it dose sometimes limmit the writers limmits in a pooem, but this is very good :)

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