Then By What Impulse … 0206-2k13 Poem by saadat tahir

Then By What Impulse … 0206-2k13



Then by what impulse the crazy hath
Girdled them selves with hell's wrath
Washed, trimmed, broken last bread
Ablutions done and prayers said
In vacant eyes the devil’s dance
gnome, sprite and demons prance
to them the virtuous virgins appear
in twisted rants, been made clear
in a distant heartless gaze, is set
the wonton fury of death beset
they know the fold, of a holy light
no smile or pain nor scattered blight
as they walk up to a mundane life
in a flash meant for an ugly strife
a kid there eyeing a melon ripe
hurrying woman for her child’s gripe
old man bent under gathered wood
Watchman shaded under flimsy hood
Bikes stand helper pulling a chain
bearded mullah at a holiness feign
then Lucifer’s cue, a horrific boom
for life to thrive is left no room
implode explode is one big mess
blood flows ample to mix in a cess
visions of rapture? a rainbow ascent?
tears and death in dungeon’s descent
shred up gore is the burden of earth
The love and life in a tore up hearth
in shards of metal and sorrow, sent
To unholy thoughts and acts is lent




original
02nd Jun,2k13
Islamabad.
(first couplet fixed as per prof: SBNs directive)

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Suicide bombers and the aftermath..
cant forget the premath of drone attacks either, that kill and maim countless hundreds, just as arbitrary, just as callous and thoughtless
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Shahzia Batool 04 June 2013

Very important message, not a simple poem to be read, rated, praised and voted just, a message to be spread everywhere, a hidden message...we all share this...Then by what impulse...we are suffering from 2 kinds of education, lack of right guidance, and excess of misguidance with no checks at all...Your rhyming sense is an example for students of poetry, but i don't understand the reason why didn't you dwell on the rhyming of the first couplet, don't give up finding the suitable rhyme either for DONE or for WRATH...like bloodbath..., and one more thing, it is good that you know well that you are not only the poet of a select circle who understands the choice English, as far as the important message or commentary on important point is concerned, the diction should be within the reach, and here you have accomplished it! ! !

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Yasmin Khan 03 June 2013

I've been reading it many times and trying to go deep into it (as all your poems deserve) . It's a sad and gloomy picture but very true and realistic as usual in perfect rhyme. The choice of word and images is apt complementing the theme. And again I would say you could render it perfectly, with some memorable lines/ phrases: 'to them the virtuous virgins appear in twisted rants....a holiness feign' and many like these.

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