The Trip Poem by Vincent Dali
The Trip
Like an unripe melon
Like a conquer Magellan
Like a handy capped Helen Keller
There is a moonster in the cellar
He has been there since last November
I was once a member-
Of his palace
Until I was hit in the head with a mallet
Creeping along the halls
I have spotted the moonster in conversation with the white rabbit
Me thinks that white rabbit has a nasty habit-
Of being late
Last time they nearly locked the gate
Is his clock too slow?
Or is telling time his foe?
At least the moonster and purple tiger know
Acid is a trip that is not a trick for kids
But the rabbits white hair show great age
Maybe his mind is like that of a mage
I saw him once pull himself out of his own hat
Very impress for a magician with a assistant gnat
He buzzes around the rabbit’s head, a dark shade of blue
The rabbit does not reek, I have seen him use his wife’s shampoo
If I may take the time
I must say for a rabbit his wife is a dime
I even saw her and purple tiger in the shower at the same time
Of course the white rabbit was too late to catch them of this crime
Just then I told the purple tiger not to eat the white rabbit or the Chinese Girl
“She is your world! ”
You just don’t know it and she will not show it
So he devoured the loaf of bread instead
i must say at first i wasn't really feeling the story line. but i am very glad i finished it out, for it turned out to be a very nice, interesting, and creative work and i am jelous that i did not think of the idea first. i tip my hat to you,10
This poem was very....interesting...a bit confusing but i think confusing is always a good thing Good Job -Tyease
A composition written with different imagery though have a great rhyming of words...Packed with different known personalities like Magelan and Helen Keller...just curious what is moonster? Though i didn't find it misspelled because you have said it alot of times, so I assumed that 'moonster' is a name you made to the cresent of the moon, that in your story the moon may appear also like a monster.... As Wolfy said your poem is like Alice in Wonderland......entertaining and penned in eloquence....10
I'm afraid to ask what a moonster is because it might be something like a monster. This is like Alice in wonderland. I really never understood that thing either. So, I'll just avoid making comments about something I know nothing about. I really can't say what this is. But I guess it's fun so that makes it entertaining. GW62
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/24/2024 12:06:05 AM # 1.0.0.1119
a poem of wild fanasties and imaginations...also quite like alice of wonderland however, the beats of each rhyming pair of lines of your poem are off by quite a lot-the first line may be rather long, while the second drastically short. it is rather hard on the ear when read aloud, so you may want to add or reduce the sylables to make it smoother. i believe in constructive critizism, not just praise-i hope you will take my suggestions into consideration, even if you do not change this poem in any way. lc