The Ten Commandments Poem by David DeSantis

The Ten Commandments

Rating: 2.9


Don't ever have
sex with strangers
is what
a bird
once told me.

Thirty strangers
later i find,
something that
works for me.

Don't ever kill,
the bird sang,
unless to live,
I suppose is alright.

In killing I
find no thrill.
Although,
I stepped
on a worm today.

Don't ever cheat,
on your spouse.
its not right
to play that game.

What if your spouse,
Is cheating on you?
I'd rather
screw
than play
that game.

Do not lie
it's not allright,
And is that
what Jesus would do?

If Jesus is
What your looking for,
To find him
I think,
you'd be lying too.

Don't fantasize,
About that girl
Her skirt is short
for comfort.

She's a dirty whore
This we can see,
But I can
give her
comfort.

Don't ever worship
another bird,
Or build a statue,
Of a Robin.

It's true that I,
find all birds,
Really quite
intrusive.

And if you should
find a lie.
Send it back
From where
it came,

Wouldn't it be,
nicer to lie?
We can't
all come from
where I came.

Do not drive
your neighbor's car
And his wife,
She shares his name

If a neighbor,
had something to take,
To share is very,
neighborly.

Just please
don't,
have sex with strangers,
It's quite easy
To catch a
disease.

On this
The bird
and I agreed.
Fire, works
Quite
forcefully.


Copyright (c) David DeSantis

Friday, April 11, 2008
Topic(s) of this poem: fairy tale,humor
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Triin Kann 11 April 2008

This poem brought a smile on my face: Thank you for sharing.

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LOVEFOOL Aka 11 April 2008

Very good as ever, darkly funny with a good insight on life thanks Nik

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Original Unknown Girl 12 April 2008

Ha ha! ! I really like this and no, I'm not very Christian at all (whatever gave you that idea? ? ?) Very funny poem, I grinned through the whole reading! HG: -) xx

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Flora Gillingham 16 April 2008

Loved it, David. Don't forget to polish the car before you give it back! F

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Casey Gauthier 16 April 2008

I had really good time reading this poem. great job!

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Sathyanarayana M V S 29 October 2008

This introspection/interpretation of paradoxities is really a wonderful idea. U did it so well.

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Rinzu Susan Rajan 03 October 2008

OMG... I INITIALLY THOUGHT U HAD INTERPRETED THE TEN COMMANDMENTS IN UR OWN STYLE... BUT U LEFT ME FLABBERGASTED...! ! ! !

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Reshma Ramesh 03 October 2008

you know you have the guts to write what you think........you are extremely honest and i like that in your poems

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Loyd C Taylor Sr 24 April 2008

Hello David. A little vulgar for my taste. However, you do have a great way with words, wonderful imagery, good work. LC

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~ Jon London ~ 21 April 2008

I love this poem, what a fine piece....fantastic creation All the best JL

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